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Daioista
DaioistaLv112yr
2023-03-14 01:52

For starters, I don't mean to offend the author or his effort in the story, this is just my criticism. The development of the world is interesting. The characters are interesting and have personality. The biggest problem with the story is the protagonist himself, he's just too boring, especially his obsession with building a harem for jayden, this is just too annoying, we're 100 chapters into it and it doesn't seem like it's going to change anytime soon, it's totally disappointing to read the story, the mc is making fun of a boy's sexuality for following the prince, but he literally does the same thing with jayden???? Author I know you said this was going to change but the question is when? you are not going to insist on the protagonist being jayden's nanny for 200 chapters, are you?

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EPJ007
EPJ007Lv14

nice comment 👍 couldn't have said it better

Ayce_o_Spade
Ayce_o_SpadeLv15

Whatdo you mean he is building harem for the protagonist? Theres no way right? Why would the author write the novel like that?

Daioista
DaioistaLv11

Basically the protagonist transmigrated as a villain into a harem and is 100 chapters trying to make the false protagonist stay with all of the harem... A nanny of the false protagonist.

Ayce_o_Spade:Whatdo you mean he is building harem for the protagonist? Theres no way right? Why would the author write the novel like that?
Ayce_o_Spade
Ayce_o_SpadeLv15

More details if you dont mind. Does edward have a harem too? Or is he just hooking up the MC with all the heroines? Whats his reasoning for doing so? Im just super confused and wondering if I should even read this. I just got to vol 2.

Daioista:Basically the protagonist transmigrated as a villain into a harem and is 100 chapters trying to make the false protagonist stay with all of the harem... A nanny of the false protagonist.
Daioista
DaioistaLv11

Well... there are some girls interested in him, but those girls were also part of the fake protagonist's harem, so edward keeps pushing them towards the fake pragonist. Well, his motivation is because he's like those protagonists who are obsessed with the original story and do their best not to change it.

Ayce_o_Spade:More details if you dont mind. Does edward have a harem too? Or is he just hooking up the MC with all the heroines? Whats his reasoning for doing so? Im just super confused and wondering if I should even read this. I just got to vol 2.
Ayce_o_Spade
Ayce_o_SpadeLv15

Wait the girls like him but hes attempting to push them on someone else? Is he a cuck? What kind of drugs was the author smoking when he thought that was a good idea.

Daioista:Well... there are some girls interested in him, but those girls were also part of the fake protagonist's harem, so edward keeps pushing them towards the fake pragonist. Well, his motivation is because he's like those protagonists who are obsessed with the original story and do their best not to change it.
Daioista
DaioistaLv11

Yes, depending on the point of view this story can be considered an NTR... The author did it with a promise that the protagonist would change, but honestly after 100 chapters watching the protagonist create a harem for another I am totally discouraged from reading the history.

Ayce_o_Spade:Wait the girls like him but hes attempting to push them on someone else? Is he a cuck? What kind of drugs was the author smoking when he thought that was a good idea.
Ayce_o_Spade
Ayce_o_SpadeLv15

I’t really is like vanilla NTR.

Daioista:Yes, depending on the point of view this story can be considered an NTR... The author did it with a promise that the protagonist would change, but honestly after 100 chapters watching the protagonist create a harem for another I am totally discouraged from reading the history.
Zorvog
ZorvogLv4

Did it get any better?

Daioista:Yes, depending on the point of view this story can be considered an NTR... The author did it with a promise that the protagonist would change, but honestly after 100 chapters watching the protagonist create a harem for another I am totally discouraged from reading the history.
GAMING_IS_MUST
GAMING_IS_MUSTLv14

oh so the protagonist is one of those reta... I mean idiots.....

Daioista:Well... there are some girls interested in him, but those girls were also part of the fake protagonist's harem, so edward keeps pushing them towards the fake pragonist. Well, his motivation is because he's like those protagonists who are obsessed with the original story and do their best not to change it.
warriorofnorth
warriorofnorthLv15

i was going to read this novel but after i read your review i changed my mind, what kind of mc build harem for other people? is this an evolved sheep or something?

Dragos_6115
Dragos_6115Lv4

Right it's annoying honestly it was good until the mc became obsessed with making a harem for that J guy or something

Ayce_o_Spade:Whatdo you mean he is building harem for the protagonist? Theres no way right? Why would the author write the novel like that?
Dragos_6115
Dragos_6115Lv4

Believe me I wish I had read the reviews earlier I wouldn't have wasted my time reading it haaa what a waste

warriorofnorth:i was going to read this novel but after i read your review i changed my mind, what kind of mc build harem for other people? is this an evolved sheep or something?
ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

I also agree... it's really annoying 😔

ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

Right

Ayce_o_Spade:Wait the girls like him but hes attempting to push them on someone else? Is he a cuck? What kind of drugs was the author smoking when he thought that was a good idea.
ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

Yeah

Ayce_o_Spade:I’t really is like vanilla NTR.
ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

Yes

Dragos_6115:Right it's annoying honestly it was good until the mc became obsessed with making a harem for that J guy or something
ShiroNeko280
ShiroNeko280Lv4

True

Dragos_6115:Believe me I wish I had read the reviews earlier I wouldn't have wasted my time reading it haaa what a waste
Manager_san
Manager_sanLv14

Hwaa its a good thing i read this review first totally not my cup of tea 😗

Tylor_Roney
Tylor_RoneyLv14

got like 40 chapter in and iIam.sick of reading a mc who wants another person Jayden get all the womanthat's all he does help the mc JaydenThough he was the villain not a wingman support character

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