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Kage_n0_OuLv31yr
2023-10-06 06:55

This novel is a pretty decent read but there are some aspects that really bothered me. 1) The dialogue. Listening to kindergarteners and elementary school kids interact would be more interesting than the social interaction in this novel. It's severely lacking in flow and feels very "basic" as another review said. 2) The MC himself. His decisions felt so frustratingly dumb, you'd wonder how the guy is a grown adult. His combat master almost died because MC wasted time asking questions when he was instructed to run away. They had just finished struggling to defeat one wolf and the rest of the pack was coming and MC was asking dumb questions like "Isn't it just some wolves? Why do we have to run?" They only survived from luck. Another time, during the tournament, after catching the enemy who had been shooting at him, he threw the guy away instead of finishing him off. This was during a battle Royale, mind you.In regards to the grammar, I have no complaints and the plot itself looks interesting. Just these two things made the novel difficult to read for me.

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Ok. First of all, I don't want to offend the author with this review. Secondly, I'm going to review the first 20 chapters. With that said I'm implying that the book will surely improve in future chapters, as the author gets experience but judging by the first 20 Ch I have to say I didn't like this. First, the fact that the MC wants at all costs become a pro player is stupid, at least in my opinion. I don't think some people would really want to try a path with no certainties in a situation where he has no money and doesn't know how to survive. Aside from that, the story itself is nothing new. Aside from the fact that the MC chose a difficult race, there is nothing innovative here. The world-building seems pretty standard, again nothing new. The fact that the MC meets the weapon trainer and the mage "trainer" at the beginning already points to where the author wants to go, but it is another clichè, even the I Got the Masters is a whole clichè. As for the plot itself, where does it lead? What is it that makes it different from other books? Then, the writing quality. Ok, there are not many grammatical errors, yet the MC talks in a weird way with the NPCs, in a totally different way from real life and different compared to how he talks IRL. Then, the fights: essentially Here is the enemy, here is the enemy status, here is a couple of skills, enemy felled. It is rather simple. Notice: This is just my personal opinion. I'm by no means trying to offend or saying my words are absolute. This is an opinion. Feel free to disagree and to read.

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