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Jerrysrich1
Jerrysrich1Lv158mth
2024-08-23 12:01

This novel has a great concept but why isn’t there more technological aspect? It’s called “Biological SUPER COMPUTER!” Meaning that it will deal with biology along with technology. But so far, there isn’t any forum of technology being used/created. It’s already 200 chapters in and the MC barely had any character advancement; still sorta rules by his emotion; severely lack intelligence; and far too naïve. A The MC believes he’s grow and smart to make sound decisions, but so far it’s as if he’s being led by Circumstances, always on the defensive. Hopefully this story will improve; but we will see! Author make sure you add more technology to this novel. There’s so much that could be done!

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PilgrimJagger
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I did in the latter part of the book. At the beginning I was very inexperienced, so I didn't exactly know how to do things. I was doing a rework of the book, but I haven't been unable to complete it and won't likely be able before I finish the book itself (I'm now on the last narrative arc). However, when I do it, there will be many changes.

Jheydi327
Jheydi327Lv14

Bro you really need to re-write your book.. First Impression on the book is the most important and MCs mindset at the start was a huge let down..

PilgrimJagger:I did in the latter part of the book. At the beginning I was very inexperienced, so I didn't exactly know how to do things. I was doing a rework of the book, but I haven't been unable to complete it and won't likely be able before I finish the book itself (I'm now on the last narrative arc). However, when I do it, there will be many changes.
PilgrimJagger
PilgrimJaggerAuthor

I'm doing it. It's a slow process though.

Jheydi327:Bro you really need to re-write your book.. First Impression on the book is the most important and MCs mindset at the start was a huge let down..
Jheydi327
Jheydi327Lv14

Even better if you take your time author. Don't rush it.

PilgrimJagger:I'm doing it. It's a slow process though.
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Wylden_BondLv15

Writing quality: Top notch. Few if any errors that pull you out of the story. Story Development: Absolutely splendid read, you have a bullied kid, parental problems, PTSD/trauma, then coming across a "Opportunity" this leads to its own set of problems but incredible potential positives outcomes. To a solid bit of foreshadowing of something major occuring in the story early on and gradually picking up into a grand finale of sorts. Can't imagine what we will be getting to experience in this story few hundred chapters from now. Character Design: Solid work here across the board. Consistently expressing other characters and how the occurrences in the story in itself effected them. Showing growth in the main character early on and being consistent with it. Main character isn't broken op and still has enemies but clearly you can see what his growth rate will be like in the future. Updating stability: I want to see 14 chapters a week. I personally read extremely fast. So I'm generally picky here. And I like basically being able to get on every day and getting to read a solid 2 chapters from Novels I am really enjoying. Meh I'm needy/greedy when it comes to good literature can't help it. I just read most of the chapters in burst and caught up to the most recent chapter so I can't judge on this and so forth leaving it at 5 stars until further notice. World Background: Overall solid, the author gives good description of environments that the "present" story is taking place in from schools, training areas, bedrooms and more and has also included this in combat scenes in the use of weapons or defenses. The story has gone over some history but it's been here and there for me, this is probably not what most people will think, it's just what I personally would prefer a bit more in this one specific aspect. Can't help it I'm needy. More I have to read of this the better. Total: 5 out of 5 in each category until further notice. It's definitely caught my eye and I'm now paying attention to it's uploads. Very enjoyable read that makes me want more. To see what's coming next. Final Verdict will be given when the author reaches 1,000 chapters or the novel is otherwise abandoned.

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