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Peripheral
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2023-05-27 08:17

The authors book provides a great amount of context of the environment with plenty of information. However, his obsession to provide every character their own two page dialogue and Background really ruins the entertainment from the Main story. IDk why he bothers when the reader know's they're a dead Man, EX investigator, and the nightclub kid (Achim). However, this is an Author who Clearly loves to write. I hope to read more of his work as he Improves. P.S Author... you forgot to mention the brain crystal from Martin Hais in chapter 290. (MC Never absorbed it in future chapters)

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PilgrimJagger
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I didn't forget, if I don't explicitly say that he does something then he didn't. As for the too much background I would say that Is a personal opinion, if you ask, any author will tell you the right thing is to know each character as best as you could, and to be as deep as possible when making their stories . Objectively there is no right or wrong here, just preferences.

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he doesn't*

PilgrimJagger:I didn't forget, if I don't explicitly say that he does something then he didn't. As for the too much background I would say that Is a personal opinion, if you ask, any author will tell you the right thing is to know each character as best as you could, and to be as deep as possible when making their stories . Objectively there is no right or wrong here, just preferences.
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