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UrCaterpillar
UrCaterpillarLv12yr
2022-12-05 05:19

let's get a general overview. the story is set in a futuristic world with flying cars, robots, and advanced technology. in this world, everyone has a brain crystal that gives them superpowers. our young protagonist, Erik is a bullied student with an F rank power who discovers a system that turns his life around. the world building is intricate to say the least. Pilgrim doesn't spare any effort when It comes to descriptions and paints a vivid image of the background in your head. his words flow together beautifully. the story starts out nice and slow, it doesn't rush the reader nor is it stressful on them. not much can be said about it as of now, it's still a bit early, but there are some rather exciting upcoming arcs which I'm looking forward to. updating stability is excellent too, a solid two chapters everyday. i would say Pilgrim's writing style could use a bit of work though, so could his character design. we'll certainly see improvements in the future. all in all a 10/10 for system lovers, if you're not reading, then i don't know what you're doing :3

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Wylden_Bond
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Writing quality: Top notch. Few if any errors that pull you out of the story. Story Development: Absolutely splendid read, you have a bullied kid, parental problems, PTSD/trauma, then coming across a "Opportunity" this leads to its own set of problems but incredible potential positives outcomes. To a solid bit of foreshadowing of something major occuring in the story early on and gradually picking up into a grand finale of sorts. Can't imagine what we will be getting to experience in this story few hundred chapters from now. Character Design: Solid work here across the board. Consistently expressing other characters and how the occurrences in the story in itself effected them. Showing growth in the main character early on and being consistent with it. Main character isn't broken op and still has enemies but clearly you can see what his growth rate will be like in the future. Updating stability: I want to see 14 chapters a week. I personally read extremely fast. So I'm generally picky here. And I like basically being able to get on every day and getting to read a solid 2 chapters from Novels I am really enjoying. Meh I'm needy/greedy when it comes to good literature can't help it. I just read most of the chapters in burst and caught up to the most recent chapter so I can't judge on this and so forth leaving it at 5 stars until further notice. World Background: Overall solid, the author gives good description of environments that the "present" story is taking place in from schools, training areas, bedrooms and more and has also included this in combat scenes in the use of weapons or defenses. The story has gone over some history but it's been here and there for me, this is probably not what most people will think, it's just what I personally would prefer a bit more in this one specific aspect. Can't help it I'm needy. More I have to read of this the better. Total: 5 out of 5 in each category until further notice. It's definitely caught my eye and I'm now paying attention to it's uploads. Very enjoyable read that makes me want more. To see what's coming next. Final Verdict will be given when the author reaches 1,000 chapters or the novel is otherwise abandoned.

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