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Kancha_T
Kancha_TLv42yr
2022-12-14 01:28

Maybe I am being unreasonable, but I was intrigued and intersted when I read the story title, but it didn't reach expectations... This might be because your still in the starting stage and the MC needs time to adapt and settle but the plot seemed quite slow to me. I quite didn't understand some decisions by MC and it seemed to me that he became a little reckless once Jarvis arrived. Also I thought this would be multiversal and other stuff being involved with lots of action, but as far as I understood this is kind of slice of life in the real world only with MC having some power. I'll let more chapters to stack and come back afterwards to try this once again, but for now I will give this a pause. Keep up the writing though because many more like where your going with this, but not everyone's tastes match. P.S: Your Marvel story with John as MC is still one of my favourite though...

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thelightedghost
thelightedghostAuthor

Yes. Its slow for now. But action is coming. Or at least I will be trying my best. Thanks though

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AsianLadyBoy
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Cacakman
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