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WalterHeisenberg
WalterHeisenbergLv42yr
2022-12-07 21:19

BRO THE AUTHOR GAMBLED AND LOST!😂😂😂😂 HE REALLY GAVE THE WORST DF!!!!!! HE EVEN DELETES 3 STAR n BELOW REVIEWS 💀💀💀💀

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JustSomeDude00
JustSomeDude00Lv4

lol did you even read the review? or you just comment to trash talk the author? You'll so petty, if you don't like the book drop it. you ppl don't even bother to delete/modify your previous comment when you're proven wrong. You just leave at is, gaining like and ruining new readers to even try the fanfic. you'll disgust me

Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

What devil fruit did he give the MC? Im considering to read the story but the facts its a weak MC is a real turn off

Lord_Cynrik
Lord_CynrikLv11

He starts off weak but trains really hard, actually I would argue he grows strong a little too quickly if anything. We don’t entirely understand how his df works yet but it’s very different from any other fruit I’ve seen

Crimson_King:What devil fruit did he give the MC? Im considering to read the story but the facts its a weak MC is a real turn off
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

It being different doesnt mean its a good fruit. I just personally dont like powers that focus on luck or gambling.

Lord_Cynrik:He starts off weak but trains really hard, actually I would argue he grows strong a little too quickly if anything. We don’t entirely understand how his df works yet but it’s very different from any other fruit I’ve seen
Lord_Cynrik
Lord_CynrikLv11

I didnt say it was good, i just said it was different. We dont know much about his fruit yet so im not really giving my opinion about how much i like it. Since it’s a very different concept, I want to see where they go with it before forming my opinion

Crimson_King:It being different doesnt mean its a good fruit. I just personally dont like powers that focus on luck or gambling.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Do you mind explaining the fruit concept the best you can? From all i know i just heard its a luck based power and it sucks.

Lord_Cynrik:I didnt say it was good, i just said it was different. We dont know much about his fruit yet so im not really giving my opinion about how much i like it. Since it’s a very different concept, I want to see where they go with it before forming my opinion
Lord_Cynrik
Lord_CynrikLv11

From my understanding he has two main abilities. One is a gamble, that allows him to temporarily gain or lose strength depending on the outcome of the gamble. The amount of strength gained or lost depends on the luck of himself and whoever he is gambling against. His other ability allows him to store luck over time, so if he encounters a powerful enemy he can use up his luck all at once for a greater powerup. That may not be entirely accurate but that’s my understanding, so it doesnt really change his fighting style and basically just gives him an excuse to have plot armor. I’m not sure how this might change with how he develops the fruit or awakens it, and it seems like there are more specifications regarding the gambling, for both the temporary powerup and the use of stored luck against his foe. I will say that this devil fruit is the worst part of the story by far, even though i don’t dislike it. I really like every other aspect of this story, I’m just not sure what to think about the df ability yet, however it doesnt change his fighting style, just his ability to maybe fight stronger opponents so I think it’ll be fine.

Crimson_King:Do you mind explaining the fruit concept the best you can? From all i know i just heard its a luck based power and it sucks.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

That sounds like a horrible fruit. Sounds so boring to read. Reminds me of the story where the MC got a normal bear zoan. Sure the author was talented and made good stories so the one piece story itself was good but the fruit was so boring in my eyes. Theres a reason why most MCs have either Logia or Mythical Zoan.

Humbuub
HumbuubLv5

Thanks for explaining, most bad reviews only stated that he got a bad DF. Although Luck isn't a concept that fits One Piece's DF, it's more of an awakened version of Urouge's Karma fruit.

Lord_Cynrik:From my understanding he has two main abilities. One is a gamble, that allows him to temporarily gain or lose strength depending on the outcome of the gamble. The amount of strength gained or lost depends on the luck of himself and whoever he is gambling against. His other ability allows him to store luck over time, so if he encounters a powerful enemy he can use up his luck all at once for a greater powerup. That may not be entirely accurate but that’s my understanding, so it doesnt really change his fighting style and basically just gives him an excuse to have plot armor. I’m not sure how this might change with how he develops the fruit or awakens it, and it seems like there are more specifications regarding the gambling, for both the temporary powerup and the use of stored luck against his foe. I will say that this devil fruit is the worst part of the story by far, even though i don’t dislike it. I really like every other aspect of this story, I’m just not sure what to think about the df ability yet, however it doesnt change his fighting style, just his ability to maybe fight stronger opponents so I think it’ll be fine.
Divine_Booster
Divine_BoosterLv1

That one fic is really good.

Crimson_King:That sounds like a horrible fruit. Sounds so boring to read. Reminds me of the story where the MC got a normal bear zoan. Sure the author was talented and made good stories so the one piece story itself was good but the fruit was so boring in my eyes. Theres a reason why most MCs have either Logia or Mythical Zoan.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Well I’m sure the fic was good. The author is a good writer. I just found the devil fruit boring.

Divine_Booster:That one fic is really good.
Daniell_Moore
Daniell_MooreLv3

Whats the fic called?

Crimson_King:Well I’m sure the fic was good. The author is a good writer. I just found the devil fruit boring.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

The bear fruit story? One Piece: Desperate By Holyjoker

Daniell_Moore:Whats the fic called?
Mlnt
MlntLv4

Anyone know where holyjoker went?

Crimson_King:The bear fruit story? One Piece: Desperate By Holyjoker
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

He went somewhere? Did he stop updating his stories?

Mlnt:Anyone know where holyjoker went?
Damian0481
Damian0481Lv13

aah holy joker... the edgy evil mcs...

Crimson_King:The bear fruit story? One Piece: Desperate By Holyjoker
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Edgy and evil for no reason. Runs from romance at every turn. Always gives weak reasons for stupid decisions.

Damian0481:aah holy joker... the edgy evil mcs...
UnsterblichPlebb
UnsterblichPlebbLv4

JustSomeDude00:lol did you even read the review? or you just comment to trash talk the author? You'll so petty, if you don't like the book drop it. you ppl don't even bother to delete/modify your previous comment when you're proven wrong. You just leave at is, gaining like and ruining new readers to even try the fanfic. you'll disgust me
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