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Teaalk
TeaalkLv152yr
2022-08-10 05:57

It was a good story unti the author came up with the MC's devil fruit. It is such a stupid devil fruit in my opinion. After all it is not based on the ability of the MC but on the luck the author is willing to gift him. After that I lost all interest in the story. If you want to read an MC whose main ability is to gamble with the luck the MC is given by the author it is THE story for you, but if you are like me and you want to to read a story about a MC who is relying on his own strenght, then this story is not for you.

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Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

What fruit did the MC get? I hate Luck based powers, doesnt help that the weak MC tag is a real turn off. Plus the Author just seems like trash.

Teaalk
TeaalkLv15

I forgot. It's been 4 months since I've stopped reading the story after all.

Crimson_King:What fruit did the MC get? I hate Luck based powers, doesnt help that the weak MC tag is a real turn off. Plus the Author just seems like trash.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

I didnt think it was a good story from the reviews but it seems like it really wasnt anything special

Teaalk:I forgot. It's been 4 months since I've stopped reading the story after all.
Jonathan_Lam_2034
Jonathan_Lam_2034Lv4

lottery fruit

Crimson_King:What fruit did the MC get? I hate Luck based powers, doesnt help that the weak MC tag is a real turn off. Plus the Author just seems like trash.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

That sucks

Jonathan_Lam_2034:lottery fruit
Great_Young_Master
Great_Young_MasterLv5

Yeah, somehow, the author thought that a Devil fruit (I think it was Root Root fruit) that works PERFECTLY with his type of reckless fighting style by healing him whenever he gets injured (he gets injured a lot, and I mean A LOT in his fights). I'd understand it a bit more if the MC is the strategic type, but he is clearly the brutish type, which I won't say is bad, but the MC clearly got the less incompatible fruit within him...

Crimson_King:That sucks
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Oh I’m not a fan of weak MCs

Great_Young_Master:Yeah, somehow, the author thought that a Devil fruit (I think it was Root Root fruit) that works PERFECTLY with his type of reckless fighting style by healing him whenever he gets injured (he gets injured a lot, and I mean A LOT in his fights). I'd understand it a bit more if the MC is the strategic type, but he is clearly the brutish type, which I won't say is bad, but the MC clearly got the less incompatible fruit within him...
Great_Young_Master
Great_Young_MasterLv5

The MC isn't exactly weak but not too strong, either. The MC definitely got that main character plot armor where the more they fight, the stronger they become (and resilient). Keep in mind, though, this was a pre-time skip, which is why the author didn't make the MC too strong and not too weak either (I'll guarantee that the MC will definitely gets way stronger with the way he's progressing in a short amount of time). Honestly, this story definitely had the potential to be one of the best One Piece stories, but the author somehow ruined one aspect of the story, which in turn ruined all parts of it, it's commendable really.

Crimson_King:Oh I’m not a fan of weak MCs
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

It’s commendabl how easily he messed it up. Even then I still dont really enjoy weak MCs they’ are just often boring to read. Although the same can be said for OP MCsd

Great_Young_Master:The MC isn't exactly weak but not too strong, either. The MC definitely got that main character plot armor where the more they fight, the stronger they become (and resilient). Keep in mind, though, this was a pre-time skip, which is why the author didn't make the MC too strong and not too weak either (I'll guarantee that the MC will definitely gets way stronger with the way he's progressing in a short amount of time). Honestly, this story definitely had the potential to be one of the best One Piece stories, but the author somehow ruined one aspect of the story, which in turn ruined all parts of it, it's commendable really.
Shimano
ShimanoLv14

I read to ch 104. Let me tell you, if you ignore first thoughts of the luck. You will find that is not based on luck at all.

Nullity_Marrionete
Nullity_MarrioneteLv14

Wait a second he does have the lottery fruit however how is that week or necessarily look related I mean all this can do is I don't know he can make trades contracts etc etc with other people to take devil foods vitality and possibly even battle prowess for a certain amount of time.I mean bro it's such an overpowered fruit that's barely luck related I mean all the luck thing has to do with it is that it just makes the trades or contracts more harder that's literally it it can even be used for training I mean I don't even know what you mean by the devil who being messed up if anything it's actually pretty good which is why I think you guys probably didn't read after that chapter or probably didn't even finish the devil fruit being fully explained

Crimson_King:It’s commendabl how easily he messed it up. Even then I still dont really enjoy weak MCs they’ are just often boring to read. Although the same can be said for OP MCsd
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Hm I don’t know, I didnt even read the story at all. I just went by what the other commenter said. I just don’t normally like powers that have to do with luck. They are either completely useless or completely overpowered. There is no way to make good luck based powers. Atleast from what I’ve read. All I know of the devil fruit is that it’ lottery. What you described doesn’t sound like lottery, it sounds more like a contract fruit or an exchange fruit. Which in that cause is just the Author naming his fruit wrong.

Nullity_Marrionete:Wait a second he does have the lottery fruit however how is that week or necessarily look related I mean all this can do is I don't know he can make trades contracts etc etc with other people to take devil foods vitality and possibly even battle prowess for a certain amount of time.I mean bro it's such an overpowered fruit that's barely luck related I mean all the luck thing has to do with it is that it just makes the trades or contracts more harder that's literally it it can even be used for training I mean I don't even know what you mean by the devil who being messed up if anything it's actually pretty good which is why I think you guys probably didn't read after that chapter or probably didn't even finish the devil fruit being fully explained
Nullity_Marrionete
Nullity_MarrioneteLv14

thank you thank you I have seen so many comments that are straight of bullying the author I mean I know he's just deleting comments but he could be doing a lot worse so thank you also for actually understanding my opinion because there was another guy who said that I did more bad than good by existing how am I even supposed to choose that? and personally not I think about it it does sound like a contract fruit or exchange fruit so I do get it

Crimson_King:Hm I don’t know, I didnt even read the story at all. I just went by what the other commenter said. I just don’t normally like powers that have to do with luck. They are either completely useless or completely overpowered. There is no way to make good luck based powers. Atleast from what I’ve read. All I know of the devil fruit is that it’ lottery. What you described doesn’t sound like lottery, it sounds more like a contract fruit or an exchange fruit. Which in that cause is just the Author naming his fruit wrong.
Nullity_Marrionete
Nullity_MarrioneteLv14

also if so I think you should probably continue to read the story to see how he actually uses his devil fruit so from the chapter where he got his devil fruit and to chapter 105 he uses his devil fruit for all of those things so you should be expecting them.

Crimson_King:Hm I don’t know, I didnt even read the story at all. I just went by what the other commenter said. I just don’t normally like powers that have to do with luck. They are either completely useless or completely overpowered. There is no way to make good luck based powers. Atleast from what I’ve read. All I know of the devil fruit is that it’ lottery. What you described doesn’t sound like lottery, it sounds more like a contract fruit or an exchange fruit. Which in that cause is just the Author naming his fruit wrong.
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Well if the fruit really is more like a conteact or exchange fruit then all I can say is that it was the Author naming mistake. Maybe if he goes back and changes the fruits name changes the powers a bit. The story would be able to get more traction. People are just really tired of lottery or Gacha powers. At least I am, they are never good. Either too weak cause the Mc can’t be OP Or too strong and suddenly the Mc hasn’t everything from other worlds. Personally I like stories to try to keep powers and items from the same world unless it’s multiverse fic. I don’t want to see Zanpakuto in One Piece or Naruto just adds more powers to worlds with already clearly established power systems.

Nullity_Marrionete:thank you thank you I have seen so many comments that are straight of bullying the author I mean I know he's just deleting comments but he could be doing a lot worse so thank you also for actually understanding my opinion because there was another guy who said that I did more bad than good by existing how am I even supposed to choose that? and personally not I think about it it does sound like a contract fruit or exchange fruit so I do get it
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Well if it’s really not lottery then maybe it’ll be worth a try.

Nullity_Marrionete:also if so I think you should probably continue to read the story to see how he actually uses his devil fruit so from the chapter where he got his devil fruit and to chapter 105 he uses his devil fruit for all of those things so you should be expecting them.
Haidarah
HaidarahLv4

luck? such bs absurd ability thanks for the warning

Nullity_Marrionete
Nullity_MarrioneteLv14

You must have skipped the entire conversation I had the devil fruit is barely based off of luck it's just a tiny portion of its abilities have to deal with it I mean there's this luck bar which he can use to make a deals more fair or easy but that is literally all it is other than that he can make deals to get rewards or lose something kind of like a gambling fruit so the luck part about it is barely there I mean it can be used to make a deals easier but that's literally it.

Haidarah:luck? such bs absurd ability thanks for the warning
Timothy_Thorn_4813
Timothy_Thorn_4813Lv15

stupid author 🙄 , an his stupid book

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