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pafroLv42yr
2022-08-29 07:39

I'm at chapter 61, story was good MC joined strawhats for a good reason but the mc quickly becomes stale and lacks personality. additionally, MC gets a horrible devil fruit that is based on luck from the author and it doesn't feel like a one piece power more like nen. so I lost interest and stopped reading it 3/5 not horrid just disappointing

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Dark_Crow_Dao
Dark_Crow_DaoLv14

Thank you for your review.

N1CK999
N1CK999Lv2

Its super OP FRUIT wym bro,

Victor_7740
Victor_7740Lv14

meh tbh personally idrc about his df it's his haki that matters Roger Rayleigh Garp were one of the strongest in the world without any df, and Kaido said it himself haki alone can make you the strongest

Cup_Cake009
Cup_Cake009Lv3

Kaido saying THAT is like Richie Rich quoting "Money doesn't buy happiness". Ironic how both saying are technically right but absolute bullshit at the same time.

Victor_7740:meh tbh personally idrc about his df it's his haki that matters Roger Rayleigh Garp were one of the strongest in the world without any df, and Kaido said it himself haki alone can make you the strongest
Victor_7740
Victor_7740Lv14

Ironic ye but he isn’t wrong. Roger with his haki alone is on par with white beard with both strong df and haki

Cup_Cake009:Kaido saying THAT is like Richie Rich quoting "Money doesn't buy happiness". Ironic how both saying are technically right but absolute bullshit at the same time.
Cup_Cake009
Cup_Cake009Lv3

Yeah but that requires innate Potential and talent like Rogers. Someone who doesn't have even one of those can never reach such heights. That's where devil fruit comes in. They have the power to increase the innate potential of a person. But ultimately it also depends on what kind of fruit you get. Even Makino can defeat some Rear Admirals if she had Kaido's fruit. So yeah, they are a grand factor.

Victor_7740:Ironic ye but he isn’t wrong. Roger with his haki alone is on par with white beard with both strong df and haki
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EpicGamer123
EpicGamer123Lv4

Great story! Glad it's not your typical OP from the start MC. He starts off really weak but is progressing at a nice pace. Also cool that he's encouraged the rest of the crew to train more too. Particularly Nami and Usopp. They've got so much untapped potential that is literally waiting to burst out. Only thing that I've found a bit iffy, and they aren't even too big, is 1. Why's bro keep calling Luffy captain? Like, I get he's your captain, but he's also your friend. Call him Luffy in normal situations, but call him captain in serious ones. And 2. I feel he's giving out too much information. I know he's set up a background where it would make sense, but that background is a pretty weak one which could be easily popped, and doesn't explain why he's knows so much about certain individuals. Some things I suggest for your story, which aren't really too involved with your character as I like him. 1. Add onto his "backstory". 2. For close combat, when you reach Skypeia, have Usopp implement dials into his Hammer for close range. Maybe also have him get those bouncy boots from the Shandians (Can't remember too well, it's been quite a while). 3. Make them spar and learn off each other. By now I feel at least Robin, Franky, and Brook should've unlocked some basic haki. We've got 4 masters of it on board the ship now, there aren't much excuses. It would be cool if SH were like a Rocks second coming, although on a much smaller scale. Where all the Strawhats in their prime are atleast 3rd Commander level. And last 4. Please add in some wholesome canon chapters. Where it's not all about plot, and it's just the crew getting up to their same old shenanigans. That's all from me, sorry for the word vomit. Just wanted to get across to you how good your story is and possible things to consider. I know you've already gotten a lot of comments on it, and you've already responded, but I just wanted to emphasize how much you can't drop. Thanks!

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