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raptorfalcon
raptorfalconLv52yr
2022-05-21 03:38

Great concept ruined by poor writing. The author just keeps randomly adjusting what the skills/sequences do. For example, at some point regeneration increases the MCs speed. Or unlocked skills spin and increase his power. MC passes on a skill that increases his strength from eating, but later on he eats and his power increases. So on and so on. Really a shame.

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ExodusGaming555
ExodusGaming555Lv6

Huh??? Dude I've read till chp 30 and no such things happens like u said

raptorfalcon
raptorfalconLv5

I will sift through this pile of junk again just for you.... Chapter 3 describes Devour as the skill that allows him to get body size as he eats smaller organisms. At this point the size of the slime is described as about a fist. HE DOES NOT PICK IT. So then he gets stronger and poison immunity from where? BTW, he gets poisoned even after getting immunity... I should also point out that split has a fraction of the size and power of the main slime. So, the fight with the snake is pure BS. Even if adds up all the small bodies it would at most equal the size and strength of the original, which was definitely not big enough to rupture the snake's stomach (they are good at expanding). Chapter 8, first paragraph says regeneration increased his speed and agility. Chapter 20 has the stuff about the sequences circulate crazily and somehow that added up to him having 10 times the strength. BTW this novel is basically a rewrite of the faloo novel someone posted. Except, the MC on that one fuses with a spore. To that MC choosing split and perception works, but when this author copied it, things got messed up. That MC has to use his brain to fight because the spore has no attack power, this one can get stronger through devouring and use frontal attacks. Unfortunately, the copying makes this one make no sense in some areas.

ExodusGaming555:Huh??? Dude I've read till chp 30 and no such things happens like u said
ExodusGaming555
ExodusGaming555Lv6

After some reading this, i think ur mostly right. But i think he wouldn't be able to defeat any enemy during the trial/test if he had chosen devour and evolve as his stat is trash from the start. If he didn't get perception and split, he wouldn't be able to find the cave nor could he fight as he is too weak even after eating all those earthworms and precious plants. His first kill is literally overstuffing the snake with slime from split. Although it could be argued how big those slime combined could become, but a slime at the size of our hand is ± 7 inches and he fused 8 or 10 slimes right?? A fusion of them creates a 70 inches slime in diameter, thats a 177 cm in diameter, imagine a hamster ball for a human adult. Also to implode something by overstuffing them, it doesn't need body strength but body mass/size. (but strength kinda helps a bit) Not only that, without those 2 skills, mc not only have to constantly escape against mobs, he also have a high chance on meeting that killer mantis or the cobra who was hunting outside at the time. while taking mimic also kinda needs devour to work as it seems like he can only mimics already devoured creature if i recall it correctly (and it's strength is still based on his own stat) Lastly Regen is the last option he would ever take as it doesn't help at all in the early stages. I agree with you that this novel have plot holes more than the holes from a butterfly net but it's quite an interesting read.

raptorfalcon:I will sift through this pile of junk again just for you.... Chapter 3 describes Devour as the skill that allows him to get body size as he eats smaller organisms. At this point the size of the slime is described as about a fist. HE DOES NOT PICK IT. So then he gets stronger and poison immunity from where? BTW, he gets poisoned even after getting immunity... I should also point out that split has a fraction of the size and power of the main slime. So, the fight with the snake is pure BS. Even if adds up all the small bodies it would at most equal the size and strength of the original, which was definitely not big enough to rupture the snake's stomach (they are good at expanding). Chapter 8, first paragraph says regeneration increased his speed and agility. Chapter 20 has the stuff about the sequences circulate crazily and somehow that added up to him having 10 times the strength. BTW this novel is basically a rewrite of the faloo novel someone posted. Except, the MC on that one fuses with a spore. To that MC choosing split and perception works, but when this author copied it, things got messed up. That MC has to use his brain to fight because the spore has no attack power, this one can get stronger through devouring and use frontal attacks. Unfortunately, the copying makes this one make no sense in some areas.
raptorfalcon
raptorfalconLv5

I believe "Split" bodies are a fraction of the size of the original, so even if you split 30 bodies, with each being 1/30 of the original's size and strength, putting them together still would only return a "whole" slime. I think the novel has its merit and the idea is great, but the problem is the writer itself. He is just blatantly stealing from the original while trying to make it match his new slime idea. As long as he/she keeps doing that, we'll see issues. I wish the author would just take the idea and run with it on his own while properly thinking the MC abilities.

ExodusGaming555:After some reading this, i think ur mostly right. But i think he wouldn't be able to defeat any enemy during the trial/test if he had chosen devour and evolve as his stat is trash from the start. If he didn't get perception and split, he wouldn't be able to find the cave nor could he fight as he is too weak even after eating all those earthworms and precious plants. His first kill is literally overstuffing the snake with slime from split. Although it could be argued how big those slime combined could become, but a slime at the size of our hand is ± 7 inches and he fused 8 or 10 slimes right?? A fusion of them creates a 70 inches slime in diameter, thats a 177 cm in diameter, imagine a hamster ball for a human adult. Also to implode something by overstuffing them, it doesn't need body strength but body mass/size. (but strength kinda helps a bit) Not only that, without those 2 skills, mc not only have to constantly escape against mobs, he also have a high chance on meeting that killer mantis or the cobra who was hunting outside at the time. while taking mimic also kinda needs devour to work as it seems like he can only mimics already devoured creature if i recall it correctly (and it's strength is still based on his own stat) Lastly Regen is the last option he would ever take as it doesn't help at all in the early stages. I agree with you that this novel have plot holes more than the holes from a butterfly net but it's quite an interesting read.
Uchiwa_Madara
Uchiwa_MadaraLv14

The only think I memorize of all of this is than an original novel is out there but I don't see the name. Can you give it pls ? Or is that the same name but with spore instead of slime ?

raptorfalcon
raptorfalconLv5

The raw to that novel is in Faloo and only some of the chapters are available. Someone else posted it on the review section. I would love to continue reading that one, but unfortunately I could not find a place to read it after the free chapters.

Uchiwa_Madara:The only think I memorize of all of this is than an original novel is out there but I don't see the name. Can you give it pls ? Or is that the same name but with spore instead of slime ?
chaz_mars
chaz_marsLv15

ok. some of your points can be put onto mistranslations and typos. as for others you may be misremembering. yes he did choose not to get devour at the start. however this was also under the premise that he would gain all 6 abilities/sequences in time. the reason he gained power from eating is because those were special resources filled with spiritual power. notice how he didnt gain any special abilities from the mutated earthworms only insignificant amounts of biomass. and poison immunity was 100% a typo/mistranslation or immunity to specific poison. based on later reading probably supposed to be just resistance. as for the unlocked skills circulating and increasing his power that is something along the lines of active vs passive ability. compare to actively using your computer vs having it idle while you do other stuff. overall there doesnt seem to be any issues with this story that a competent editor couldnt solve.

Zetsway
ZetswayLv13

Your argument is invalid...he only won because he !!DEVOURED!! some plants and small animals before the fight. Even if he didn't have the skill to do so. Had be picked the skill, the story would be much more coherent. He doesn't need perception or split to find a cave. Sure, he's not 100% of his safety, but he has a way to get stronger and staying in the safe area till he's strong enough is a good plan. Then, there's the fact that he choose the Perception skill that somehow makes him aware of 10 Km(??of what, radius, square) but the sneak still ambushed him, so it was a useless skill. The only thing it was used for was to tell us there was a Mantis somewhere in the forest.

ExodusGaming555:After some reading this, i think ur mostly right. But i think he wouldn't be able to defeat any enemy during the trial/test if he had chosen devour and evolve as his stat is trash from the start. If he didn't get perception and split, he wouldn't be able to find the cave nor could he fight as he is too weak even after eating all those earthworms and precious plants. His first kill is literally overstuffing the snake with slime from split. Although it could be argued how big those slime combined could become, but a slime at the size of our hand is ± 7 inches and he fused 8 or 10 slimes right?? A fusion of them creates a 70 inches slime in diameter, thats a 177 cm in diameter, imagine a hamster ball for a human adult. Also to implode something by overstuffing them, it doesn't need body strength but body mass/size. (but strength kinda helps a bit) Not only that, without those 2 skills, mc not only have to constantly escape against mobs, he also have a high chance on meeting that killer mantis or the cobra who was hunting outside at the time. while taking mimic also kinda needs devour to work as it seems like he can only mimics already devoured creature if i recall it correctly (and it's strength is still based on his own stat) Lastly Regen is the last option he would ever take as it doesn't help at all in the early stages. I agree with you that this novel have plot holes more than the holes from a butterfly net but it's quite an interesting read.
soulcruzhsr_1_0
soulcruzhsr_1_0Lv4

wow this review has turned to a chat group ooo 😂

Peryite
PeryiteLv5

Faloo novel?

raptorfalcon:I will sift through this pile of junk again just for you.... Chapter 3 describes Devour as the skill that allows him to get body size as he eats smaller organisms. At this point the size of the slime is described as about a fist. HE DOES NOT PICK IT. So then he gets stronger and poison immunity from where? BTW, he gets poisoned even after getting immunity... I should also point out that split has a fraction of the size and power of the main slime. So, the fight with the snake is pure BS. Even if adds up all the small bodies it would at most equal the size and strength of the original, which was definitely not big enough to rupture the snake's stomach (they are good at expanding). Chapter 8, first paragraph says regeneration increased his speed and agility. Chapter 20 has the stuff about the sequences circulate crazily and somehow that added up to him having 10 times the strength. BTW this novel is basically a rewrite of the faloo novel someone posted. Except, the MC on that one fuses with a spore. To that MC choosing split and perception works, but when this author copied it, things got messed up. That MC has to use his brain to fight because the spore has no attack power, this one can get stronger through devouring and use frontal attacks. Unfortunately, the copying makes this one make no sense in some areas.
GHOST_SABER
GHOST_SABERLv3

slimes are usually elastic and they take shape of a tube if it's put inside a tube. plus snake is also very elastic as its belly can be stretched more than its original width so stuffing it till it bursts is not that possible

ExodusGaming555:After some reading this, i think ur mostly right. But i think he wouldn't be able to defeat any enemy during the trial/test if he had chosen devour and evolve as his stat is trash from the start. If he didn't get perception and split, he wouldn't be able to find the cave nor could he fight as he is too weak even after eating all those earthworms and precious plants. His first kill is literally overstuffing the snake with slime from split. Although it could be argued how big those slime combined could become, but a slime at the size of our hand is ± 7 inches and he fused 8 or 10 slimes right?? A fusion of them creates a 70 inches slime in diameter, thats a 177 cm in diameter, imagine a hamster ball for a human adult. Also to implode something by overstuffing them, it doesn't need body strength but body mass/size. (but strength kinda helps a bit) Not only that, without those 2 skills, mc not only have to constantly escape against mobs, he also have a high chance on meeting that killer mantis or the cobra who was hunting outside at the time. while taking mimic also kinda needs devour to work as it seems like he can only mimics already devoured creature if i recall it correctly (and it's strength is still based on his own stat) Lastly Regen is the last option he would ever take as it doesn't help at all in the early stages. I agree with you that this novel have plot holes more than the holes from a butterfly net but it's quite an interesting read.
Fiaran
FiaranLv14

I agree there are serious problems with the execution of this novel, but it's got potential. So what is this faloo novel mentioned? I can't find a title anywhere in the reviews.

raptorfalcon:I will sift through this pile of junk again just for you.... Chapter 3 describes Devour as the skill that allows him to get body size as he eats smaller organisms. At this point the size of the slime is described as about a fist. HE DOES NOT PICK IT. So then he gets stronger and poison immunity from where? BTW, he gets poisoned even after getting immunity... I should also point out that split has a fraction of the size and power of the main slime. So, the fight with the snake is pure BS. Even if adds up all the small bodies it would at most equal the size and strength of the original, which was definitely not big enough to rupture the snake's stomach (they are good at expanding). Chapter 8, first paragraph says regeneration increased his speed and agility. Chapter 20 has the stuff about the sequences circulate crazily and somehow that added up to him having 10 times the strength. BTW this novel is basically a rewrite of the faloo novel someone posted. Except, the MC on that one fuses with a spore. To that MC choosing split and perception works, but when this author copied it, things got messed up. That MC has to use his brain to fight because the spore has no attack power, this one can get stronger through devouring and use frontal attacks. Unfortunately, the copying makes this one make no sense in some areas.
Fiaran
FiaranLv14

Really? You don't think that sending a small proportion of students who have just acquired a symbiote and not adjusted to either the changes to their bodies or how to use their symbiots' abilities into a month long death battle and calling it training makes no sense and is in no way justified? What reason is there not to just, I don't know, give them actual training? Maybe some combat teachers work with them to adapt to their changed bodies and help them figure out what abilities they have and how to use them in combat. The only justifications for this would be imminent death. That is, mankind is pressed to the limit, and only a few more geniuses can save them. If three to six months of training could develop some fantastic warriors, why would you risk the death or disabling of the (supposedly) small proportion of people who actually manage to aquire (and retain) symbiotes?

chaz_mars:ok. some of your points can be put onto mistranslations and typos. as for others you may be misremembering. yes he did choose not to get devour at the start. however this was also under the premise that he would gain all 6 abilities/sequences in time. the reason he gained power from eating is because those were special resources filled with spiritual power. notice how he didnt gain any special abilities from the mutated earthworms only insignificant amounts of biomass. and poison immunity was 100% a typo/mistranslation or immunity to specific poison. based on later reading probably supposed to be just resistance. as for the unlocked skills circulating and increasing his power that is something along the lines of active vs passive ability. compare to actively using your computer vs having it idle while you do other stuff. overall there doesnt seem to be any issues with this story that a competent editor couldnt solve.
Eldwood_Kaumeheiwa
Eldwood_KaumeheiwaLv15

the initial review seemed comprehensive, but it went into overdrive the further down I read.

soulcruzhsr_1_0:wow this review has turned to a chat group ooo 😂
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