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8ightbit
8ightbitLv43yr
2022-02-11 01:58

I honestly don't know how to describe this.. The story progression is extremely slow and longwinded.. Like for example, MC goes on his first mission, at chapter 28.. The comedy is practically non-existent and dry to the point that you'd find more moisture on the crusty feet of your 95 year old grandmother.. The story is extremely dull and there's no progression, quite literally.. Like one moment MC is just a normal guy, then suddenly decides to becomes a cannibal that drinks blood willingly without batting an eye, and even takes great pleasure from it.. it is just disgusting and weird.. Like what sane person would do that, MC was normal???? idk what author is doing with this story tbh, I feel like, he wants the MC personality to be "cool" "baddass" or "mysterious" ..... unless, your a immature little brat, that thinks frowning or doing the duckface when you're getting your picture taken is cool, it is none of those.. I can only describe MC as; "Ughh".. yes, that's how I describe it folks.. ^^ MC is not interesting, and that is basically a fanfic killer, because, If your MC isn't good or interesting then, why would anyone read this? There's no planning or structure to the story, it is too serious, a smidge of darkness and basically boring.. and this story wasn't meant to be those things, It is about traveling the omni-verse where characters of fiction come alive! It is about MC having fun in basically infinite worlds.. It is none of that and a disappointment.. so yeah.. this is my review.. If you found it helpful you're welcome for the time saved.. Writing Quality - 2/5 Stability of Updates - 3/5 Story Development - 1/5 Character Design - 1/5 World Background - 2/5 Overall/total - 1.8 / 5

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Jheydi327
Jheydi327Lv14

True

Dr_Chad
Dr_ChadLv13

8ightbit
8ightbitLv4

What I mean is, imagine, you.. You're a perfectly law abiding citizen, you pay your taxes, you grew up in a loving family, basically, had a pretty normal life with ups and downs.. So, will you one day, just start drinking blood and become a cannibal, out of the blue, and throw away all your morality randomly, because you got a system?.. ?????? a normal person wouldn't do that, unless they've always been psychotic.. whereas the MC was normal from all accounts.. so basically like I said no character building.. it is objective criticism, if author can't handle it, then.. what can i do? Oh, and I've been reading "Magical Marvel (HP X MCU)" recently, you should try it, it's good.. Or if your looking for a good vampy story, that's done right, take note from this "A Hunger for Blood and Magic"

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Fuehrer
FuehrerLv3

well.. if it's like that, I'll say 'plot armor' and 'for that storyline'.. and thanks for recommendation I'll see that

Moge_KO
Moge_KOLv4

You didn't even mention every conversation with his Harem is bland and uninteresting. Honestly, This just seems like a wish fulfilment Novel with the Author inserted as the main protagonist.

AshGod7
AshGod7Lv4

time saved indeed.

KumThrone
KumThroneLv2

Thank you for the save.. You forgot one crucial detail! HES USING THE most PUREST BEINGS in 40k as the Book cover!

Genesis_YT
Genesis_YTLv4

in the original gamer han Jin woo (don't know if this is his right name) becomes a near emotionless killer so this is pretty accurate when having the gamers mind

8ightbit:What I mean is, imagine, you.. You're a perfectly law abiding citizen, you pay your taxes, you grew up in a loving family, basically, had a pretty normal life with ups and downs.. So, will you one day, just start drinking blood and become a cannibal, out of the blue, and throw away all your morality randomly, because you got a system?.. ?????? a normal person wouldn't do that, unless they've always been psychotic.. whereas the MC was normal from all accounts.. so basically like I said no character building.. it is objective criticism, if author can't handle it, then.. what can i do? Oh, and I've been reading "Magical Marvel (HP X MCU)" recently, you should try it, it's good.. Or if your looking for a good vampy story, that's done right, take note from this "A Hunger for Blood and Magic"
Genesis_YT
Genesis_YTLv4

synopsis: unrealistic romances and slowpaced people:why are the romances so bland and why is this story slow paced

Moge_KO:You didn't even mention every conversation with his Harem is bland and uninteresting. Honestly, This just seems like a wish fulfilment Novel with the Author inserted as the main protagonist.
Zarc_Dragnero
Zarc_DragneroLv3

He didn't kill humans, only killed monster from exp

Genesis_YT:in the original gamer han Jin woo (don't know if this is his right name) becomes a near emotionless killer so this is pretty accurate when having the gamers mind
Genesis_YT
Genesis_YTLv4

that's because he didn't need to do you think a normal person can suddenly run at a crowd of zombies.

Zarc_Dragnero:He didn't kill humans, only killed monster from exp
Zarc_Dragnero
Zarc_DragneroLv3

This is the effect of the "player's mind" skill, which makes him see the world as a game, and always keeps it calm

Genesis_YT:that's because he didn't need to do you think a normal person can suddenly run at a crowd of zombies.
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