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PUERKO_Senpai
PUERKO_SenpaiLv43yr
2021-11-12 14:33

excellent fanfiction, entertaining and easy to get hooked on. the MC is a relatively ordinary person with some logical thinking. I like how the story is developing and I would like to ask the AUTHOR-DONO that the MC please have a harem and the sister be part of the harem.

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InGlorious
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I usually don't write a review because they mostly get deleted but I still decided to drop a review for this fic... This fic really needs a review which pointed out it faults. I am trying to help you out as this is a good fanfic. If you ignore this or delete this, I won't mind. Writing Quality- 4 stars Your paragraphs are huge. Please don't write such huge paragraphs. It gets really annoying to read but aside that, everything is fine. Story Development- 3 stars There are is a lot of mess you have have made in the story but you still trying to force the plot to continue on its path. Character Design- 2 stars You main character is a controversy. I won't go into the mess about anti-hero. He said that he wanted to go unnoticed by Aizen and the goes to Hueco Mundo,that is Aizen's backyard. I understand that the system is hiding his presence so I will leave that aside. He said that he didn't want to change the timeline but he goes and saves Ichigo's mother. With Yhwach's broken ability known as Almighty, there is no way that he wouldn't notice that. Even if system helps to hide the woman, saving Ichigo's mom means that Isshin Kurosaki won't get back his powers. In the canon he only got back his Soul Reaper powers when his wife died. And there is also the fact that the MC killed Aizen's pet project to save Ichigo's mom. I bet the system can't hide that. So, you have already changed the plot so much that you simply can't continue with the same timeline. Updating Stanility- 5 stars World Background- 5 stars That's my review. As I said previously, I don't mind if you delete this but it will do you good if you consider the things I have just mentioned...

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