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Jay_Corbitt_0777
Jay_Corbitt_0777Lv142yr
2022-03-21 07:24

I’m sorry, ot seems like a great book but no one, and I mean NO ONE, is that dense or stupid. It just completely lost me. I get trying to create a story but it really just feels forced.

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Devils_Advocate
Devils_AdvocateLv13

You know, if you happen to write a negative review, you could at least specify what exactly you mean, which is so outrageous that it made you drop it.

Lorddarkskin
LorddarkskinLv15

Thank you finally someone is speaking some truth. How can you live in such a world being so stupid. Without plot armor you would die in 5 minutes.

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