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2021-10-29 00:06

For a "modern" story, the world this takes place in is still future dystopian. The world building is somewhat there, but it seems that organized crime is the true government in all the cities. The focus on the MC has distracted from better character development of any of the peripheral characters leaving the story to feel unbalanced. This could get better over time. I've really enjoyed MVS and think it had better direction and focus from the start. This story needs more of both.

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This is a sci-fi/action series where characters have the opportunity to evolve using special serums and mutate with traits of other animal creatures for combat. Society is largely ruled by gangs, and not just anyone can live just anywhere. The main character himself is a gangster, but this isn’t explored fully. Although he has a family, there has been little world building or time spent with his family members or at his home, so he comes across as a rather shallow character. The other characters suffer from lack of depth as well, and they are quite forgettable. My Vampire System has a similar problem with character depth and making readers feel emotionally attached to and sympathetic toward the characters of the series, but it’s even worse here. The character designs are overall quite weak and forgettable. The story development largely makes sense so far, although not too much has happened yet. Some of the characters don’t make the most logical choices, especially the main character, but neither do real people. Even when there are some clearly important and critical things for the main character to explore, such as experimenting with his physique or testing out his abilities, he ignores these things altogether. He doesn’t make the wisest choices, and some of the planning in the plot is odd but may make sense later on. The world background is in desperate need of being filled up and shown, not told. Although some details have been explained to the readers, little has been shown to them to let them experience this world through the senses of the main character or other characters. This series could improve in quality dramatically by fleshing out the world and characters themselves. Although this is a series about werewolves, it’s clear by this point that the author didn’t do any research on wolves themselves due to obvious errors in describing wolves’ behaviors. If you’re here because you like wolves, then you will be disappointed. If you are here for werewolves and not the animal they’re based on, then you may still enjoy the series. If you are here for wolves and want to learn more about wolves by reading this series, then you should make a hasty retreat. Overall, some people may still like this series, but I don’t like it’s worth spending spirit stones or fast passes on with its current level of writing. That said, the writer could dramatically improve the quality of his series by trying to build the world and characters more.

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