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2023-10-01 08:03

"The writing quality is poor, and the way characters interact is not well-executed. I find the story overall unsatisfying. I'm uncertain about the recent chapter updates. The narrative feels disjointed, and I'm struggling to understand how it's plausible for a 5-year-old to behave like an adult. It's difficult to take a 5-year-old seriously in such a context. Additionally, the story appears to be granting more power to the enemy without clear justification, which is confusing. While the story may have some similarities with 'Game of Thrones' in terms of characters, it lacks the depth and consistency of the original series. Overall, the narrative feels disorganized. I would appreciate some revisions or, at the very least, a time skip to make the progression of events more believable. It's challenging to consider this level of maturity as normal, even in a fictional setting, when the character is only 5 years old. Please consider addressing these issues for a more coherent reading experience.

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