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Gr1m_R34p3rLv13yr
2022-01-20 05:52

I hate novels suggesting children as low as 4 years old fighting like some kind of pro. Choosing warrior over magic was a bad choice. I think 5% of the word count goes to “My lord” and other addresses. A 5-7 year old child given control over his territory and speaking to other lords etc like an equal and suggesting that either they join him or be his enemies. To the author I would suggest some tume skip. I hate these novels that Herve people spamming reviews.

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TruthOnlyReaderLv5

It is game of thrones... Like my guy, that is what they say for most of the lines in Game of Thrones, what do you expect from medieval era fanfiction? Plus there is a progression in the story this ain't freaking SAO where the character doesn't see them work hard for their rank. If we keep doing excessive time skip then it would just be a boring story. Game of Thrones is heavily lore-based. PLUS do not say, "oh he is treating them like an equal when they are not," dude just shut up, it is medieval time, it is normal courtesy to say stuff like that. In Game of Thrones, respect and honor are highly valued, in the game of thrones you either due or survived. This is why he is recruiting people and allying himself with other lords. The only reason why he is surviving is due to the angels granting him certain strengths. He barely survived his duel with Lord Drumm in which the former wielded Red Rain a valyrian steel sword. He won't be able to survive if he goes against knights like Ser Arthur Dayne or Jamie Lannister, as they are the best knights of the realm. Also, he does have time skips when it isn't meaningful, the story so far needs these plots for our MC to progress.

SorceinLv3

I haven't started reading the story yet, but in Game of Thrones men start training since they were children, and there are several cases of children assuming the lordship of their home, in the series it appears 2. (Google translate)

THIZZGATORLv4

so you're okay with a 7 y/o being taken seriously for a great majority of the story? Also he doesnt almost lose at all it was a breeze of a confrontation that somehow a 11 y/o even with acrobatic level abilities won. It's all a bit far fetched imo that full grown man strength and speed dont prevail. Like its game of thrones tone down the fantasy just a tad.

TruthOnlyReader:It is game of thrones... Like my guy, that is what they say for most of the lines in Game of Thrones, what do you expect from medieval era fanfiction? Plus there is a progression in the story this ain't freaking SAO where the character doesn't see them work hard for their rank. If we keep doing excessive time skip then it would just be a boring story. Game of Thrones is heavily lore-based. PLUS do not say, "oh he is treating them like an equal when they are not," dude just shut up, it is medieval time, it is normal courtesy to say stuff like that. In Game of Thrones, respect and honor are highly valued, in the game of thrones you either due or survived. This is why he is recruiting people and allying himself with other lords. The only reason why he is surviving is due to the angels granting him certain strengths. He barely survived his duel with Lord Drumm in which the former wielded Red Rain a valyrian steel sword. He won't be able to survive if he goes against knights like Ser Arthur Dayne or Jamie Lannister, as they are the best knights of the realm. Also, he does have time skips when it isn't meaningful, the story so far needs these plots for our MC to progress.
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