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DemonVenerable_12Lv11yr
2023-09-19 14:45

I'm kind of disappointed; I mean I'm not saying that the idea is bad but it feels the story is unrealistic for the most part and the interaction between characters is just straight out weird with lots of unfamiliar terms at that point time furthermore it feels rushed and those interviews at the start was awkward- I think you should pay more attention to details and making it more realistic and engaging and that is clearly lacking. It'd be better to showcase problems of caste system and how to solve these first then go ahead with military part while also taking care of nobles which are more of a tumor. I've read another Indian novel- (India that could be by Maddymudda) So I had great expectations! Nice try to be honest much appreciated as I too hail from the south so it's quite fascinating to read this novel which has great potential, I would really like it if you could attempt a rewrite or something to attract more audience.

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Mithun_ReddyGaruAuthor

Yeah, I kind of jumped in to writing this novel with full of josh and a hint of my Intrusive thoughts taking over, but soon I finally knew the work I have to put in to make it authentic is massive, and i mean MASSIVE. I don't have that kind of time as I have a heavy schedule, and being my first novel with no prior literature experience also did not help. Fortunately, I find I like writing novels, so I will finish this novel first. I will learn as much as I can and attempt something similar in the future. Thank you for your support.

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Mithun_ReddyGaru:Yeah, I kind of jumped in to writing this novel with full of josh and a hint of my Intrusive thoughts taking over, but soon I finally knew the work I have to put in to make it authentic is massive, and i mean MASSIVE. I don't have that kind of time as I have a heavy schedule, and being my first novel with no prior literature experience also did not help. Fortunately, I find I like writing novels, so I will finish this novel first. I will learn as much as I can and attempt something similar in the future. Thank you for your support.
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