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FourPeaches
FourPeachesLv33yr
2021-08-05 10:13

It is an interesting story, the writing quality is good, stability is good, story development isn't new but has enough new elements that to make it interesting. The character design is typical of urban novels in fact sometimes a little to similar, but mc has child making it better. The MC isn't all that great, he is infected with the denseness, but also the good guy, forgiving type giving everyone 100 chances and he does not trying to get to bottom of things, it is hard to imagine him as an old wise person. The world building up this point isn't done too much but based on everything else it would probably be decent. Don't expect a vastly different story then other urban stories, but I liked it. So if you are fan of the genre and tags then give a go. The MC is a bit annoying at times but it is only 32 chapter up to this point and hopefully he will change.

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HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

happy that u liked and will sure try to improve the MC's character in the mortal world now

daoistosrio546
daoistosrio546Lv6

If it is true that the MC of your story reached the top of a cultivation world in 5000 years, but forgive and give opportunity after opportunity without killing, then there is something very wrong with your MC and he was in a false cultivation world, to unless the mc is weak and can only be stepped on and give opportunities.

HaoShu:happy that u liked and will sure try to improve the MC's character in the mortal world now
HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

buddy if u have read the chaps u will know he had killed 100 of thousands of people in a single go, he just doesn't want to kill anyone on earth just cause they threatened him. but later there will be change in his behavior so don't think he will always be same

daoistosrio546:If it is true that the MC of your story reached the top of a cultivation world in 5000 years, but forgive and give opportunity after opportunity without killing, then there is something very wrong with your MC and he was in a false cultivation world, to unless the mc is weak and can only be stepped on and give opportunities.
HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

how about you read chap 4

daoistosrio546:If it is true that the MC of your story reached the top of a cultivation world in 5000 years, but forgive and give opportunity after opportunity without killing, then there is something very wrong with your MC and he was in a false cultivation world, to unless the mc is weak and can only be stepped on and give opportunities.
daoistosrio546
daoistosrio546Lv6

I understand then I will give it a chance, I have been looking for good novels and I cannot find it, but I want to ask, is the cultivation of your mc suppressed by the laws of the land or did it lose everything?

HaoShu:how about you read chap 4
HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

well he has lost his original power man u need to read the first 3 to 6 chaps for knowing the reason it has been given in detail

daoistosrio546:I understand then I will give it a chance, I have been looking for good novels and I cannot find it, but I want to ask, is the cultivation of your mc suppressed by the laws of the land or did it lose everything?
Worn_out_by
Worn_out_byLv15

Why is it so bad though? He lived 5000 years or more is character should already be fleshed out especially given he lived in a cultivation world

HaoShu:happy that u liked and will sure try to improve the MC's character in the mortal world now
Worn_out_by
Worn_out_byLv15

Doesn’t explain why he forgives and gives stuff

HaoShu:buddy if u have read the chaps u will know he had killed 100 of thousands of people in a single go, he just doesn't want to kill anyone on earth just cause they threatened him. but later there will be change in his behavior so don't think he will always be same
HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

it's indirectly related to his cultivation technique[img=recommend]

Worn_out_by:Why is it so bad though? He lived 5000 years or more is character should already be fleshed out especially given he lived in a cultivation world
HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

he wants to since all ge cares if about his family and nothing more[img=recommend][img=recommend]

Worn_out_by:Doesn’t explain why he forgives and gives stuff
lord_couchpotato
lord_couchpotatoLv3

So what will take him to kill them? his family is killed?, I mean i get not wanting to attract trouble but just letting people go is plain stupid there are many ways to retaliate even without directly killing. How about curses, Assassination or ruin their business, Heck just threaten them. All the mc is doing for the last 30 chapters is 'you can not punch me one last chance '--->'you have knife don't use it i giving one last chance'-->'You also have gun don't use it i am giving you one last chance'-->'Now you have nothing to threaten me so i am giving you one last chance'. Why is he so stupid after living 5000 years in cultivation world. Don't get me wrong i loved the story that's why i am even reading it but MC is just ruining it for me.

HaoShu:buddy if u have read the chaps u will know he had killed 100 of thousands of people in a single go, he just doesn't want to kill anyone on earth just cause they threatened him. but later there will be change in his behavior so don't think he will always be same
HaoShu
HaoShuAuthor

yeah I can understand what u want to say, the mc is just too naive like and would not change till chap 90 but later due to sudden change of events his thought changes and he will get more angry or I this case, likely to kill many if one were to touch his reverse scale, i.e. His family abr daughter😘🤗😠😡😤

lord_couchpotato:So what will take him to kill them? his family is killed?, I mean i get not wanting to attract trouble but just letting people go is plain stupid there are many ways to retaliate even without directly killing. How about curses, Assassination or ruin their business, Heck just threaten them. All the mc is doing for the last 30 chapters is 'you can not punch me one last chance '--->'you have knife don't use it i giving one last chance'-->'You also have gun don't use it i am giving you one last chance'-->'Now you have nothing to threaten me so i am giving you one last chance'. Why is he so stupid after living 5000 years in cultivation world. Don't get me wrong i loved the story that's why i am even reading it but MC is just ruining it for me.
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Suiyan
SuiyanLv12

I took my time to finally read it, as I said I would before. Well, take this review with a grain of salt since I'm someone who doesn't like harem stories. Yes, my first issue is with the 'all girls are falling for MC' problem. That truly irritates me, but some people might like it. What about the mc's previous life friends? So far, only five years passed on Earth, right? How come only women keep appearing? Other than you typical villain men, the mc doesn't have a single friend of the same genre. It's all women, women, and more women. Is that even possible? At the very least, that was the case until the chapter I stopped reading. What about his real wife? Like, she is happy he came back... but that is all she feels... It's like she simply doesn't care at all about what happened in the last five years he was gone. It's all 'I'm happy he is back.' 'everything will be fine now that he is back' those are basically the only thoughts in her head. I thought she was supposed to be a much stronger woman after living the challenges of raising a kid five years alone. Suddenly, she became a broken doll out of nowhere. Last but not least, the descriptions. I truly can't emphasize with overly descriptive stories. I don't need to know how beautiful or run-down a place is to its minimal details. All I need to know is that it looks bad or good. Unless the description of a place or things like that is necessary for the story itself, all those detail are completely meaningless. I literally jumped at least 30 to 40% of the paragraphs in the chapters I read because I already knew that it was all a bunch of unnecessary words. I want to read a story, not an architecture project. Give, me, a, story! Of course, there were good points in the story too: Writing quality. It is definitely much better than my own books. Hahaha! I have nothing to complain in this department. Updates are fine too. They are consistent as far as I can see. This is definitely the point of a good author. The story itself had potential, at least when I read the synopsis. It really caught my eye... until the problems I mentioned appeared. PS: This last part is basically a personal taste. It has nothing to do with the author or the story. Anyway, the thing about Chinese names everywhere, including the cultivation world the MC came from. I mean, come on! What are the chances that the guy was Chinese and everyone in his world were all Chinese? The chances are ridiculously low, but that's exactly what happens. Remember, chances wise, that shouldn't be the case at all. As I said, this is just a personal taste. It has nothing to do with the story. If the author wishes that every single stone has a Chinese origin, it is fine.

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