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Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv53yr
2021-10-08 05:48

Author this is just my opinion it's up to you to listen or not, you really need to edit 50 down chapter, the early chapter was info dump and then Chapter 42 if not mistaken ,you forgot to explain why MC not use monarch indifference when he made deal with melissa and why did he didn't sell the theory in short you need to explain his action/reason, btw please tone down how you describe mc(my back was drenched in sweat) and other more.Mc in the past life became hikikomori because he didn't get scholarship after he workhard to become top1 in his school only to get stolen his scholarship from son of official so the mc was not coward or loser just a dude who lost motivation and hope to society/world so again please tone down how you describe mc as loser/pathetic

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Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

I also forgot to say, how you forgot to mention how much his training speed(stats/rank) compared to other student because he ate the seed of limit(has effect of increasing training speed) i really though u forgot its extra effect in training

DaoistM9crzI
DaoistM9crzILv11

What? You didnt read far enough as things will be explained later on. What is the point of a story that answers every mystery there is? Thre would be no thrill and yes he is absurdly fast compared to others because of the seed of limit. Furthermore, he was described as pathetic and so to express his mindest and character developmet in the following chapters

Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

I will not argue with you , i just wanna say mc really look like pathetic and dumb when he is making deal with melissa reason because he nervous and scared of melissa when he can use skill that will easily solve the problem (author reply to me why and i understand ) i just want the author to improve because when his character (ren) looks like dumb when he is not, making the reader misunderstand leaving ,anyway I didn't not ask the author to tell all info just explain the action ,beside this is not mystery or horror novle

DaoistM9crzI:What? You didnt read far enough as things will be explained later on. What is the point of a story that answers every mystery there is? Thre would be no thrill and yes he is absurdly fast compared to others because of the seed of limit. Furthermore, he was described as pathetic and so to express his mindest and character developmet in the following chapters
Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

*just explain action of ren Its also look like force when author make ren scared when he can deal with it using skill, when author can simply add that ren was saving the skill for later party(there is no mention how many hours before meeting so we a few reader assume that party was few days later or something

Wandering_Swordman:I will not argue with you , i just wanna say mc really look like pathetic and dumb when he is making deal with melissa reason because he nervous and scared of melissa when he can use skill that will easily solve the problem (author reply to me why and i understand ) i just want the author to improve because when his character (ren) looks like dumb when he is not, making the reader misunderstand leaving ,anyway I didn't not ask the author to tell all info just explain the action ,beside this is not mystery or horror novle
DaoistM9crzI
DaoistM9crzILv11

Ok, I understand. Maybe the author wants more development for the relationships or because of plot. But I find him with his real emotions interacting with others more than just being indifferent. I guess its a preference?

Wandering_Swordman:*just explain action of ren Its also look like force when author make ren scared when he can deal with it using skill, when author can simply add that ren was saving the skill for later party(there is no mention how many hours before meeting so we a few reader assume that party was few days later or something
DaoistM9crzI
DaoistM9crzILv11

I didn’t say that it was a mystery type novel I said it is better with things not being said immediately creating mystery

Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

Thrill? This is not mystery novel so simply explaining his action will not remove the thrill, and the reason why i want the author to explain his trainings speed after acquiring the seed of limit there is no mention making it look like author forgot it beside explaining effect of seed of limit in ren training will let us understand how good it is

DaoistM9crzI:What? You didnt read far enough as things will be explained later on. What is the point of a story that answers every mystery there is? Thre would be no thrill and yes he is absurdly fast compared to others because of the seed of limit. Furthermore, he was described as pathetic and so to express his mindest and character developmet in the following chapters
Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

Yeah ,I me too think it better when he not use to not became dependable on it unless necessary , ireally find it frustrating i though he became dumb in that chapter or simply forget it thanks author he reply explaining why he didn't

DaoistM9crzI:Ok, I understand. Maybe the author wants more development for the relationships or because of plot. But I find him with his real emotions interacting with others more than just being indifferent. I guess its a preference?
Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

I was typing this so I didn't not see your reply so don't mind the first few word😳

Wandering_Swordman:Thrill? This is not mystery novel so simply explaining his action will not remove the thrill, and the reason why i want the author to explain his trainings speed after acquiring the seed of limit there is no mention making it look like author forgot it beside explaining effect of seed of limit in ren training will let us understand how good it is
DaoistM9crzI
DaoistM9crzILv11

Hah, its fine. this novel is one my favorites as a newbie in reading like me read CN novels repeatedly, I found myself thinking how dumb I was thinking they were good. This novel is one of my pastimes and brings a smile to my face every time the author uploads. And unlike other authors recieves criticism very well “XIETAN” .

Wandering_Swordman:I was typing this so I didn't not see your reply so don't mind the first few word😳
DaoistM9crzI
DaoistM9crzILv11

i think people who wants the plotline to be disturbed early on read a fanfic*

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Wandering_Swordman
Wandering_SwordmanLv5

Yeah, btw i read more fanfic than original in this app,you misunderstood me i also like ren when want to keep the plot as same as possible i just carried away by comment and how much he can sell the theory and gain benifits maybe i was sleepy when reading that time i forgot ren was preserving the plot hehe

DaoistM9crzI:i think people who wants the plotline to be disturbed early on read a fanfic*
DaoistM9crzI
DaoistM9crzILv11

That’s what I noticed, the people complaining about how he doesn’t want the plot to be ruined like fanfics where the mc is so op or the mc disrupts the plotline.

Wandering_Swordman:Yeah, btw i read more fanfic than original in this app,you misunderstood me i also like ren when want to keep the plot as same as possible i just carried away by comment and how much he can sell the theory and gain benifits maybe i was sleepy when reading that time i forgot ren was preserving the plot hehe
Entrail_JI
Entrail_JIAuthor

Thank you. I will see what I can do. Though I don't think I will explain why he didn't use monarch indifference as he never planned on doing so from the beginning. The rest I will take it into consideration when rewriting.

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