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Althea_Diona
Althea_DionaLv13yr
2021-08-17 18:54

i dropped it after 13 chps. first of all, this is an uncanny copy of the novel's extra. the plot holes are many even at the beginning of the story. the mc (who was a shut in, never exercised in his life ect) just got dumped into his own novel. quickly became this unshakablly willed man who could do superhuman feats (happens in chp4 or 6? i forgot the nb but it's extremely soon) he's dumb, i was quite excited abt his sword art but just couldn't bare with the unrealisim / 1D characters/ swayed morals (in one chp he's not interested in minor girls cz he's old mentally, the other he's sad cz he couldn't see them in skimpy clothes) i just can't with the inconsistencies. the teachers don't act like teachers, for some reason a genius teenager who won a nobel was still attending highschool with them ect... does it get better? hopefully. will i stay longer to see it? no. i already wasted enough time. at least grammar is above average.

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Entrail_JI
Entrail_JIAuthor

Thank you for your review Bit sad you feel that way, but what you said makes a lot of sense. I am not going to lie to you and make some random excuse. I didn't start writing this novel very seriously in the beginning. As a fan of TNE just wanted to write something similar to it. Around chapter 20 is when I start taking it more seriously and start to develop each character. Though the beginning is somewhat similar to TNE, the story is going to be completely different. If you read a bit further maybe you can see the difference? Maybe, I don't know. I'm glad you took your time to actually even read 13 chapters, and do hope that one day you would give it another chance in the future. Regarding genius girl attending academy (well, it's true that theoretically, she was way smarter than the rest, but she came to the academy for their top-end facilities and most importantly training. No matter how smart she was, she still needed to learn how to develop her fighting abilities which was why she was attending the academy) Regarding the [swayed morals (in one chp he's not interested in minor girls cz he's old mentally, the other he's sad cz he couldn't see them in skimpy clothes], don't recall him being sad about them not wearing skimpy clothes or any of that sort, but if what you said is true then yes it seems to be very contradicting.

Raoul_Nahimana
Raoul_NahimanaLv1

With this I actually doubt you read the story Author made a statement he wanted it to be almost similar to TNE also to remind you again read the Title he is the author he knew were the most strong skill were as the author and not only that he is not strong by the standard of many he only relies on 2 skills a 5 star martial art and monarch indifference which is the most useful skill most students have D rank skill or higher the fact you commented that in a world were everyone is strong including his training with an S rank Donna and daily training potion Idk how you came up to that conclusion

danoof
danoofLv3

TNE has an annoying Mc. At least this one isn't as annoying imo.

Black_Flame777
Black_Flame777Lv12

this better than novel extra for me did u read in the beginning he said its gonna be similar to tne for 40 chaps

Frozenpanda
FrozenpandaLv3

😂😅 I don't like the weapon in TNE

RandomReaderWhoSad
RandomReaderWhoSadLv3

Bro u be missing out on some good shi......

ForgedRole
ForgedRoleLv2

It's been 6 months but I just wanted to tell you, you really are missing out, you should read up to chapter 40 cause the first 40 chapters are basically info dumps, its quite annoying but very useful at helping our curiosity, but even still, the first 40 chapters are pretty good its kind of messy but it's alright, once you reach chapter 41 the author basically fixed most of the mistakes he did, I started realizing at chapter 42 that there were less and less information just popping up randomly in the middle of a battle and stuff, and fully realized there was basically none of that at chapter 47 cause the story flowed a lot cleaner.

Kenji_Shimura
Kenji_ShimuraLv4

I dont like TNE especially the ending there are so many things ignored and forgotten and some things and relationships didnt even reach there conclusion its quite dissappointing

stay_at_home_pig
stay_at_home_pigLv2

I didn’ t even read ur entire comment and just know u haven’ read through. this is honestly the best ln out there. With all the twists and turns, it is at least, too 3.

PeculiarShadow
PeculiarShadowLv3

You should have more patience. As the author himself said the first 40 chapters is kinda boring and similar to the novel's extra but as the novel progress you will see the difference between these two novels. There is also many plotwist in here and the character development of the mc and other charactere is great. Therefore i suggest you should give a chance this novel and have more patience. You will see how cunning and manipulative the mc in the chapter 100's.

Agata_Kucharska
Agata_KucharskaLv15

Dear author: Why wont you upgrade or rewrite first chapters if you know they are not for the standard of the whole novel? I currently started reading your boo and… oh boy… the first chapters are anoying. For now the only thing that makes me keep reading them is the promise that it gets better. And the recomendation of other people. My point is: the begining of the novel doesn’t invite new readers to stay with it, so maybe consider enhancing them

Entrail_JI:Thank you for your review Bit sad you feel that way, but what you said makes a lot of sense. I am not going to lie to you and make some random excuse. I didn't start writing this novel very seriously in the beginning. As a fan of TNE just wanted to write something similar to it. Around chapter 20 is when I start taking it more seriously and start to develop each character. Though the beginning is somewhat similar to TNE, the story is going to be completely different. If you read a bit further maybe you can see the difference? Maybe, I don't know. I'm glad you took your time to actually even read 13 chapters, and do hope that one day you would give it another chance in the future. Regarding genius girl attending academy (well, it's true that theoretically, she was way smarter than the rest, but she came to the academy for their top-end facilities and most importantly training. No matter how smart she was, she still needed to learn how to develop her fighting abilities which was why she was attending the academy) Regarding the [swayed morals (in one chp he's not interested in minor girls cz he's old mentally, the other he's sad cz he couldn't see them in skimpy clothes], don't recall him being sad about them not wearing skimpy clothes or any of that sort, but if what you said is true then yes it seems to be very contradicting.
PhoenixYT
PhoenixYTLv3

Well after reading all these comments I’ve decided to try it. I just hope it won’t be a repeat of TNE like y’all said.

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