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equinotic
equinoticLv133yr
2021-07-20 17:09

story has potential, but the writing makes it muddy and slow. it has a good start, before you start to realize the author loves to explain everything. it's good and bad, a lot of world building is done, but it's mainly bad because the MC is reiterating context to almost anything. status windows? let me explain. manuals? let me explain. demons? let me explain. the main characters of my novel? let me explain. the issue is, it gets repetitive, constantly being told about this and that. the info dumps are in almost every chapter, and the author tends to overexplain instead of making it brief. for example, in chapter 26, the author uses two examples to explain the same thing. they don't build off of each other, but are both there anyway when it doesn't make sense to have both. this is my only issue with the story. the infodumps are too abundant and tedious, which only bog down the novel. otherwise, looking forward to more.

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Entrail_JI
Entrail_JIAuthor

Perfect, I will definitely heed your advice. It's sort of becoming a habit, so I def need to change it. Thanks for letting me know about this. I Will do my best to change it

shashank_panthri
shashank_panthriLv1

This is still a little prevalent in the novel like the chapters are large but short at the same time. What I mean is, the word count is okay but the material or the progress or anything is incredibly slow sometimes. The four latest chapters felt like I only 1 max 2 chapters worth of progression. I can't really explain it well, but try to understand this.

Entrail_JI:Perfect, I will definitely heed your advice. It's sort of becoming a habit, so I def need to change it. Thanks for letting me know about this. I Will do my best to change it
Entrail_JI
Entrail_JIAuthor

I see I did that on purpose because i thought that a little break after action wouldve been nice. moreover i wanted to make kevin and ren interact more naturally But i guess i can see ur point Alright, i will try to see what i can do. Eitherway yesterday was last chapter for that arc We moving onto new one today

shashank_panthri:This is still a little prevalent in the novel like the chapters are large but short at the same time. What I mean is, the word count is okay but the material or the progress or anything is incredibly slow sometimes. The four latest chapters felt like I only 1 max 2 chapters worth of progression. I can't really explain it well, but try to understand this.
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