Item: The Author's POV
Rating: 4
Author: equinotic

equinoticLv133yr

2021-07-21 01:09

story has potential, but the writing makes it muddy and slow. it has a good start, before you start to realize the author loves to explain everything. it's good and bad, a lot of world building is done, but it's mainly bad because the MC is reiterating context to almost anything. status windows? let me explain. manuals? let me explain. demons? let me explain. the main characters of my novel? let me explain. the issue is, it gets repetitive, constantly being told about this and that. the info dumps are in almost every chapter, and the author tends to overexplain instead of making it brief. for example, in chapter 26, the author uses two examples to explain the same thing. they don't build off of each other, but are both there anyway when it doesn't make sense to have both. this is my only issue with the story. the infodumps are too abundant and tedious, which only bog down the novel. otherwise, looking forward to more.

The Author's POV

Entrail_JI

4.8

864 Chs

Liked by 37 people

Replies3

Entrail_JIAuthor

Perfect, I will definitely heed your advice. It's sort of becoming a habit, so I def need to change it. Thanks for letting me know about this. I Will do my best to change it

3yr

shashank_panthriLv1

This is still a little prevalent in the novel like the chapters are large but short at the same time. What I mean is, the word count is okay but the material or the progress or anything is incredibly slow sometimes. The four latest chapters felt like I only 1 max 2 chapters worth of progression. I can't really explain it well, but try to understand this.

Entrail_JI:Perfect, I will definitely heed your advice. It's sort of becoming a habit, so I def need to change it. Thanks for letting me know about this. I Will do my best to change it

3yr

Entrail_JIAuthor

I see I did that on purpose because i thought that a little break after action wouldve been nice. moreover i wanted to make kevin and ren interact more naturally But i guess i can see ur point Alright, i will try to see what i can do. Eitherway yesterday was last chapter for that arc We moving onto new one today

shashank_panthri:This is still a little prevalent in the novel like the chapters are large but short at the same time. What I mean is, the word count is okay but the material or the progress or anything is incredibly slow sometimes. The four latest chapters felt like I only 1 max 2 chapters worth of progression. I can't really explain it well, but try to understand this.

3yr

Other Reviews

Entrail_JIAuthor

Eyo, thank you for reading everyone. Appreciate all the support that I have been receiving. Treat this 'review' as a Q&A area. Ask me whatever you want regarding the novel and I'll try my best to answer you (As long as I there aren't any spoilers) Thank you once again for reading.

3yr

Entrail_JIAuthor

Since most authors vote 5 stars for their novel, I shall follow their example and do the same. - Not looking for an excuse to rate my story 5 stars....definitely not. Jokes aside, I would really appreciate it if you could leave behind constructive criticism regarding my novel such as, - Whether my grammar needs improvement - Each chapter is too long - Structure is a mess Anything that makes me strive to become a better author is desirable, as I am looking to continuously improve myself and the story as I write

3yr

TofSpadesLv3

I'm gonna be completely honest here, this book has POTENTIAL! Author I'm not tryna gas you up but this book is GOOD. There were barely any flaws, maybe one or two mistakes but overall it was great. The structure of the writing was clear and concise and the writing quality wasn't bad either. The idea of reincarnating into your own novel sounds cool af! It kinda reminded me of Omniscient reader's Viewpoint but this was with a twist. Great job author, try to up your stability of updates and I promise you this book will blow! A definite 5 stars from me. Keep it up!

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WhiteDevilLv6

Reveal spoiler

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_oinkchanLv5

This is my second review, the first half was pretty similar to Novel's Extra but the ongoing chaps are completely different. I won't lie, I am enjoying this novel a lot. Author, I have a cover image for you in case you decide on changing. I have changed the eye color etc to make it look more like the mc. The chess pieces in the background depict how the mc thinks of them as chess pieces.

3yr

Althea_DionaLv1

i dropped it after 13 chps. first of all, this is an uncanny copy of the novel's extra. the plot holes are many even at the beginning of the story. the mc (who was a shut in, never exercised in his life ect) just got dumped into his own novel. quickly became this unshakablly willed man who could do superhuman feats (happens in chp4 or 6? i forgot the nb but it's extremely soon) he's dumb, i was quite excited abt his sword art but just couldn't bare with the unrealisim / 1D characters/ swayed morals (in one chp he's not interested in minor girls cz he's old mentally, the other he's sad cz he couldn't see them in skimpy clothes) i just can't with the inconsistencies. the teachers don't act like teachers, for some reason a genius teenager who won a nobel was still attending highschool with them ect... does it get better? hopefully. will i stay longer to see it? no. i already wasted enough time. at least grammar is above average.

3yr

aimi20Lv1

again, I drew Kevin as I imagine it😂 ....author what do you think ?? , I hope you like it🪄 ..Readers do you imagine it as I imagine it? Really he is very handsome ❤️‍🔥

2yr

Yolo_NatssLv12

Fellow Daoists Of The Grand Dao of Reading I shall warn you! Info dumps will be indeed For 40 chapters you will see Tricked unfortunately As for ever shall it be But fear not fellows To shine brightly Gems need polishing On your journey here Thou shall continue As rewards is awaiting Here you will perfect The Grand Dao of Reading With this 5-rank Grand book Your accomplishments will be Worth to remember

3yr

HgomaLv4

Here's Amanda . Love this novel , Hate the MC being a simp for chess and seeing the world as board but oh well the story is still good so keep reading it.

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