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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv13yr
2021-08-27 14:58

This is a "With a SYSTEM" story only more cringe because it is for cultivation. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. ................. .................

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ShaggyJoestar69
ShaggyJoestar69Author

Have you even read the story?

Quetzalcotal
QuetzalcotalLv4

Don't worry about him . Some people just don't like some genres , like how some people don't like comedy . I like your story though because it's refreshing to have a cultivation story where MC is peaceful and aware of the cliches . Take your time and write the story , getting negative feedback is common when writing a book because not everyone have same taste 👍🏻 .

ShaggyJoestar69:Have you even read the story?
IDontUnderstand0_0
IDontUnderstand0_0Lv4

You haven't read or seen one?

InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Why are you asking? Are you trying to defend this garbage?

IDontUnderstand0_0:You haven't read or seen one?
IDontUnderstand0_0
IDontUnderstand0_0Lv4

Srlsy? Already acting like someone owe you money? lol but no I only read few chaps and I replied to your comment before I even started but srsly what do you gain by acting like a retard in the internet?

InternetSaint:Why are you asking? Are you trying to defend this garbage?
InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

So you have no answer just insults. When I insult something I at least have a genuine reason to, you on the other hand are exactly what you just described, unreasonable and stupid.

IDontUnderstand0_0:Srlsy? Already acting like someone owe you money? lol but no I only read few chaps and I replied to your comment before I even started but srsly what do you gain by acting like a retard in the internet?
IDontUnderstand0_0
IDontUnderstand0_0Lv4

This is why it's tiring talking with retards. Read my comment again then tell me if I didn't reply to your earlier question. I really don't understand why people would find a more justifiable reason like "I have genuine reason to insult someone" but what is your genuine reason? Insulting a free to read novel because the author didn't do good on their story? Okay? That's it? What a genuine reason to have eh?

InternetSaint:So you have no answer just insults. When I insult something I at least have a genuine reason to, you on the other hand are exactly what you just described, unreasonable and stupid.
IDontUnderstand0_0
IDontUnderstand0_0Lv4

Huh? Although I can't see your latest comment here but I saw it in my notif and I really feel my iq is getting less the longer I talk to you. I'll remind you again, your question is something along the line about if I'm defending this 'garb@g3' and my reply is "lol but no" and that is after the 2 question, I pointed it out just now and I'll explain it since I feel you lacked iq to understand. I just SIMPLIFIED my reply to NO because I'm LITERALLY not defending that the story is good(according to my taste), do you understand? I'm being salty? yes I sure am because I saw a retard, I pointed it out again, do you understand? And what is that again? You're saying 'genuine reason to insult something, not someone' like "hey bro your novel is too garbage for my taste but don't worry I'm not saying you're garbage BUT YOUR WORK is garbage." I caps the words and srsly? Do you really understand what you're talking about along with your so called word play? It can literally hurt the author you know because it's as if you said they are garbage too because they are the one who made it, you don't understand? F I'm not explaining anymore I'm too lazy now to entertain you.

InternetSaint:So you have no answer just insults. When I insult something I at least have a genuine reason to, you on the other hand are exactly what you just described, unreasonable and stupid.
Spading
SpadingLv2

Don't mind that $tupid Ret@rd. He always has Reviews like this in almost every System FanFic I have seen so far... Smh...

IDontUnderstand0_0:Huh? Although I can't see your latest comment here but I saw it in my notif and I really feel my iq is getting less the longer I talk to you. I'll remind you again, your question is something along the line about if I'm defending this 'garb@g3' and my reply is "lol but no" and that is after the 2 question, I pointed it out just now and I'll explain it since I feel you lacked iq to understand. I just SIMPLIFIED my reply to NO because I'm LITERALLY not defending that the story is good(according to my taste), do you understand? I'm being salty? yes I sure am because I saw a retard, I pointed it out again, do you understand? And what is that again? You're saying 'genuine reason to insult something, not someone' like "hey bro your novel is too garbage for my taste but don't worry I'm not saying you're garbage BUT YOUR WORK is garbage." I caps the words and srsly? Do you really understand what you're talking about along with your so called word play? It can literally hurt the author you know because it's as if you said they are garbage too because they are the one who made it, you don't understand? F I'm not explaining anymore I'm too lazy now to entertain you.
Hikik0m0ri
Hikik0m0riLv3

I looked here what comments you leave, and it seems to me that you have problems with your father, if he rapes you you should contact the police and not take out your anger at people on the Internet, you have nothing to be ashamed of.

InternetSaint:Why are you asking? Are you trying to defend this garbage?
InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Your crass words can't hide your childishness. You are just another man baby.

Hikik0m0ri:I looked here what comments you leave, and it seems to me that you have problems with your father, if he rapes you you should contact the police and not take out your anger at people on the Internet, you have nothing to be ashamed of.
InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

That says a lot about you. Do you care SOOO much about this garbage that anyone disliking it hurts you on a personal level or something? you have issues...

Spading:Don't mind that $tupid Ret@rd. He always has Reviews like this in almost every System FanFic I have seen so far... Smh...
InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

I love that they just auto delete all your stupid comments. XD

Spading:Don't mind that $tupid Ret@rd. He always has Reviews like this in almost every System FanFic I have seen so far... Smh...
Spading
SpadingLv2

Is it really deleted... I can't seem to see anything deleted from my side of things though.

InternetSaint:I love that they just auto delete all your stupid comments. XD
InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Isn't that great? Imagine yourself impotently arguing with people lol...

Spading:Is it really deleted... I can't seem to see anything deleted from my side of things though.
Spading
SpadingLv2

Isn't that great... Imagine yourself replying to comments no one can't see anymore. Bye bye White American lol

InternetSaint:Isn't that great? Imagine yourself impotently arguing with people lol...
CallmeCyrus0409
CallmeCyrus0409Lv4

Just report him and this review of his.

Ghostlyyyy
GhostlyyyyLv4

his a male karen lol

CallmeCyrus0409:Just report him and this review of his.
bananaman
bananamanLv3

it's not deleted

InternetSaint:I love that they just auto delete all your stupid comments. XD
InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Are you new here?

bananaman:it's not deleted
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ThePath
ThePathLv1

Started good and funny but devolved to a cheap and badly written Xianxia knock-off. In the first chapters of the story I thought it would be a good "Crackfic" which is fun and making of the Xianxia trope mixed with an absurdly overpowered system. This however quickly dissolved and the MC just became a wanderer type alchemist following all the cliches this trope has to offer, I honestly think the creativity of the author died. The whole thing needs a re-write, the start although creative and funny doesn't flow correctly and is not well written, author the book "Story Genius: How to Use Brain Science to Go Beyond Outlining and Write a Riveting Novel" is a good one on the subject. I would like to see more western comical elements, you gave him the memories of the one and only Rick Sanchez, that is completely absurd and could've made this whole work funnier if you employed some of his crazy characteristics, although memories does not equal personality and thinking patterns they should have had a gigantic change to the MC. The MC should've embraced more of Ricks mad scientist instead of nihilistic genius (since he got young ricks memories), so stuff like him releasing T-Virus equivalents to power up non-cultivators and other wacky stuff that would've made the whole plot more engaging. An over-arching plot-point would be nice, for example MC is in one of the lower realms that exist and in the end we find that the one who is managing/created the realms did so he can sacrifice the souls of people living there for power. However our MC does not care about that. Anyway, in conclusion your novel sparked my imagination but failed to deliver, a good fan-fiction that did something similar would be "You are Courting Death" but that one didn't have a crazy scientist. Overall if you re-write this I know you can do a lot better

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