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fantacia_000
fantacia_000Lv43yr
2022-01-31 14:03

i do like this novel . but I do dislike the mc in the later chapters . it is like at first mc was smart and a bit calculative as he was living in constant danger . he was also diligent in his cultivation as he got past multiple realms easily , but in later chapters his cultivation diligence is seem decreasing . iam not badmouthing or anything it feels like he is in same realm several months . and mc also become overly emotional and and self blamer . it is like I lost the image of my mc I had in my mind from the start . mc also forgot the dangers of cultivation worlds as he severely underestimate people as uncivilized people . although i dislike mc the story of novel is good and i hope the mc come back to his usual style .

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ShaggyJoestar69
ShaggyJoestar69Author

I was planning on focusing more on the story than cultivation for a while because the mc can literally speedrun his way through the different realms especially with all the skills he has now. I'll refocus on his cultivation soon.

Alberto_Kalach
Alberto_KalachLv15

Also to cultivate he needs his circle to be completely charged

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ThePath
ThePathLv1

Started good and funny but devolved to a cheap and badly written Xianxia knock-off. In the first chapters of the story I thought it would be a good "Crackfic" which is fun and making of the Xianxia trope mixed with an absurdly overpowered system. This however quickly dissolved and the MC just became a wanderer type alchemist following all the cliches this trope has to offer, I honestly think the creativity of the author died. The whole thing needs a re-write, the start although creative and funny doesn't flow correctly and is not well written, author the book "Story Genius: How to Use Brain Science to Go Beyond Outlining and Write a Riveting Novel" is a good one on the subject. I would like to see more western comical elements, you gave him the memories of the one and only Rick Sanchez, that is completely absurd and could've made this whole work funnier if you employed some of his crazy characteristics, although memories does not equal personality and thinking patterns they should have had a gigantic change to the MC. The MC should've embraced more of Ricks mad scientist instead of nihilistic genius (since he got young ricks memories), so stuff like him releasing T-Virus equivalents to power up non-cultivators and other wacky stuff that would've made the whole plot more engaging. An over-arching plot-point would be nice, for example MC is in one of the lower realms that exist and in the end we find that the one who is managing/created the realms did so he can sacrifice the souls of people living there for power. However our MC does not care about that. Anyway, in conclusion your novel sparked my imagination but failed to deliver, a good fan-fiction that did something similar would be "You are Courting Death" but that one didn't have a crazy scientist. Overall if you re-write this I know you can do a lot better

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