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Riester
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2021-06-13 00:07

I'm new to WN as one of my friends recommended me to read this story. This story looks good but it has some flaws in its writing like the change in tense. Except that the writing is detailed and the plot is also really good. based on my enjoyment I would rate it as 5. The author can improve their writing and I'll be waiting for the upcoming chapters.

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lon_okami
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Thanks, much appreciated 🍀

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