I don't want to bash you in, like the other guy did on his review. i know this is your first novel and your still improving but am gonna have to drop. Your mc is just way to annoying, i really did try and read more, but at this point am just skimming through chapters. (Mc problems) 1: The fact the he actually paid for the wand that was disposable was just bad, he could have still made excuses or try to haggle over the wand, you think he would learn a thing or two over haggling because he grew in that type of environment, but no, He didn't. 2: Some what the same problem, butcher guy was to ripping him off but as soon as he thought that the butcher guy was helping him with the girl, he dropped everything thing because he thought he was a "man of culture" for helping him with the girl. 3: MOST ANNOYING PROBLEM OF THEM ALL! Annoying simp mc, Jesus Christ the first pretty girl that he meets he instantly goes monke mode for her, I can't imagine what would happen when he meets someone like a Princess or a Queen, that look more beautiful than her or some other higher being that's more beautiful.

This is the author here writing his review. Of course I be rating myself 5 star because it my novel. Although I may sound confident, this is my first novel ever written and I tried to include multiple genres into the story to be more interesting. After writing each chapter, I would use a reader's perspective to read and see what is wrong and how it should be improved. Sometime, I would find typos or a line does not fit so I would go back to Inkstone to fix the mistake and re-update it.

The first chapter is an excellent hook. I could see why the people would say the MC is annoying, but he seems like a realistic college student. I'm going to keep up with this story.

Its better than other novels, just not by much. I find the MC obnoxious and his actions dont really make much sense. Theres quite a few tropes in this novel that i personally find extremely obnoxious, i.e MC goes nuts for random girl #7, the world building is alright, but nothing to fawn over, and the English is confusing but not hard to read. Overall its average, but as the author stated, this is their first novel so its to be expected. Pretty good for a first novel. Though, I will be dropping it because of the tropes. I personally cant stand them.

It is a very generic novel, the author at least in the first phase did not bother to explain things, he was simply writing superficially and quickly, in my opinion there was a lack of writing with more details and explanations, as it took only 2 chapters and the MC he goes from an ordinary human who planned the death of his parents and committed suicide (he was aware of his luck, money and escape were possible) to a great powerful magician. I reading, but it is more out of false hope that the author leaves aside worn clichés and a little attention to detail and originality.

As I was reading I was pleasantly surprised by the easy flow of the story. It's easy to read and I didn't have to go over the same sentence/paragraph twice to understand what the author was trying to say. There is good pacing, and the paragraphs were nicely aligned. It tells me that the author has already grasped the basics of writing and has the potential for improvement in the future. The author should give themselves a pat in the back. Now for the cons: For most new writers when writing in the first person POV they do tend to overuse inner monologues as opposed to utilizing gestures and facial expressions as hints to the character's inner turmoils. Verbs such as frowning, smirking can also indicate mood. I would also like to see more active sentences rather than passive ones; it makes me more emotionally engaged. Overall it is a very good story and a worthwhile read. Other than the writing which has room for growth, the character development, world-building, and plot progression is intriguing and makes you hooked onto the story. Good job!

Well i liked it it was good try it you might like it anywany intresting novel hope you like it see ya brother and sister [img=update][img=update][img=coins][img=update][img=coins][img=coins][img=update][img=coins][img=update][img=coins][img=update][img=coins][img=update]

Author should really delete these 2-3 star spam reviews with no actual review in them, it lowers the rating despite how many people enjoy the novel. Those who’ve made critic comments make fair points, if you somehow get to my review first you should take them into consideration. Always remember : if you dont like the novel then you can always leave it This is also a personal guideline, any novel below 4.5 is an easy pass

Another interesting book that I am going to add to my library. So far so good. Will continue to follow up! :-) Thank you for continuously improving it too!