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2021-02-10 16:15

It is a very generic novel, the author at least in the first phase did not bother to explain things, he was simply writing superficially and quickly, in my opinion there was a lack of writing with more details and explanations, as it took only 2 chapters and the MC he goes from an ordinary human who planned the death of his parents and committed suicide (he was aware of his luck, money and escape were possible) to a great powerful magician. I reading, but it is more out of false hope that the author leaves aside worn clichés and a little attention to detail and originality.

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Idczhen
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I understand your reasoning and agreed that the first 2 chapter is indeed rough. I have already re-edit my first two chapters completely so hopefully you give me another chance of redemption. The word count for the first chapter have become 1.7k while my second chapter is 1.9k. I'm not sure if the webnovel app would update my chapter but it should be updated in the desktop.

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Idczhen
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I have decided to write my second review after having 63 chapters so far and I want to let you know a few things. One, this is my first novel so it's not a surprised for you to see so many flaws in it. Two, I never written a novel chapter format before but I have learned as I continue to write more. Now let's go to the pros and cons of this novel. Pros Stability in update of course is great and the storyline is unique in it's own way as the protagonist does not "follow the book" rules. It has some comedies and light-heart moment in a serious situation. The MC may seem like a simp but he's not because he has no lover like many male out there. Therefore, it's hard to know how to act around a female considering his inexperience. Not much pros as this novel is just the beginning of me writing in an impulse. Cons Let's say the grammars and tense could really make the story a bit confusing but smart readers should understand my meaning. Of course, if you found some wrong use of tense, do let me know so I can fix it and not look like a fool. The POV aka point of view does changes multiple time through out the novel but as I'm writing this review now. I have fully decided to get rid of the first POV to third POV as it's easier and gives me a wider range in story telling. The fight scene are not that great given I don't specialize nor have experience in how to portray one. But I will try my best to improve it and please be lenient for once. Overall, I didn't rate myself highly since most of the category is either a 3 star or 4star except for my stability of updates. I just hope you will give me a chance as a new writer in here. Thank you for reading my really long review. (However, a review should be this long to begin with xD)

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