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DvD_007
DvD_007Lv51yr
2023-01-08 22:48

not gonna lie i was excited for this, i thought maybe this would be a fanfic where they fixed some of stuff from the original but my god was i wrong. the first chapters and what do we get? one of those cringy af mcs, yeah the mc is the chaos/destruction/murder kind of dragon with ultimate power that can control all elements, master of hand to hand combat, all weapons are mastered by him and destroy the universe with his mere presence. yeah one of those self insert mcs that make the author feel good about themselves. honestly i was expecting for the mc to become something like hajin, a normal guy who was thrown into that crazy world, and choose an unorthodox class and make it op. but no we get the mc that has mastered all kind of weapons and still chooses a basic sword.

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Atty_Justin
Atty_JustinLv3

i think you wanted a bit to much to complain about his choice on the sword he choose.

DvD_007
DvD_007Lv5

yeah like I said I was expecting too much. and I complained about the choice of the sword because kim suho the protagonist has the cheat of saint sword that lets cut literally anything. and sure if the mc was some common man like kim hajin then I wouldn't think much of it, but this said he has mastered all weapons, and martial art not to mention he has the stupid background of being some chaos dragon or something. the author tried to nerf with a contract but then goes and say that he can actually break the at any point because the mc is just that strong. now if you're a fan of the novels extra then you must like how kim hajin became strong with his unorthodox way, and even then he wasn't op. and here this guy is introducing a being so strong that his mere presence could destroy that world, tell me what's fun about that? and then if his body is that of a dragon why even bother with a weapon? might as well go fist only. well what I'm trying to say is this would become incredibly boring. first there's not going to be any form of training cause mc is already master of all weapons. second no real danger is going to happen cause mc is already leagues above the main antagonist in the story, he's so much stronger that author is either going to be buffing every single villain to a crazy degree or create a bs enemy that can match his own oc, or just straight up leave them like that and have the mc beat with just his pinky finger third the mc personality is one of those in which he wants to be a spectator but still going to be involved because of dumb plot reasons the author writes. fourth there's a high chance that this is just going to turn into a waifu hunt in which the heroines will drool at the mere sight of the mc. sorry for the rant but yeah there was way too much expectation from my side, I should've known that a fanfic wasn't going to be some amazing writing that would fix what the original story did wrong.

Atty_Justin:i think you wanted a bit to much to complain about his choice on the sword he choose.
Atty_Justin
Atty_JustinLv3

I understand I truly do understand for someone who's mastered every weapon in most worlds to perfection you'd expect him to use something better or his hands since he doesn't seem to care.

DvD_007:yeah like I said I was expecting too much. and I complained about the choice of the sword because kim suho the protagonist has the cheat of saint sword that lets cut literally anything. and sure if the mc was some common man like kim hajin then I wouldn't think much of it, but this said he has mastered all weapons, and martial art not to mention he has the stupid background of being some chaos dragon or something. the author tried to nerf with a contract but then goes and say that he can actually break the at any point because the mc is just that strong. now if you're a fan of the novels extra then you must like how kim hajin became strong with his unorthodox way, and even then he wasn't op. and here this guy is introducing a being so strong that his mere presence could destroy that world, tell me what's fun about that? and then if his body is that of a dragon why even bother with a weapon? might as well go fist only. well what I'm trying to say is this would become incredibly boring. first there's not going to be any form of training cause mc is already master of all weapons. second no real danger is going to happen cause mc is already leagues above the main antagonist in the story, he's so much stronger that author is either going to be buffing every single villain to a crazy degree or create a bs enemy that can match his own oc, or just straight up leave them like that and have the mc beat with just his pinky finger third the mc personality is one of those in which he wants to be a spectator but still going to be involved because of dumb plot reasons the author writes. fourth there's a high chance that this is just going to turn into a waifu hunt in which the heroines will drool at the mere sight of the mc. sorry for the rant but yeah there was way too much expectation from my side, I should've known that a fanfic wasn't going to be some amazing writing that would fix what the original story did wrong.
DvD_007
DvD_007Lv5

right, if he is a master of all weapons then he could fight like Dante from DMC but no

Atty_Justin:I understand I truly do understand for someone who's mastered every weapon in most worlds to perfection you'd expect him to use something better or his hands since he doesn't seem to care.
Atty_Justin
Atty_JustinLv3

True and the more we talk about it I feel kind of sad also may I ask how you thought the team fight would go? Because I thought he would fight everyone by himself a 9v1.

DvD_007:right, if he is a master of all weapons then he could fight like Dante from DMC but no
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lJeDl
lJeDlLv1

It ain't that bad, if you can ignore all the cursing and edgy stuff. My problem with the cursing is that there's too much of it, I myself curse daily but not to the extent that every sentence I say contains cursing, basically the MC sounds like a brat who just learned swear words. Another thing I didn't like is the MC being too edgy and a prick all the time, like if my friend just says for me to do things all the time and that if I complain one bit he will get angry at me and says for me to 'just get on with it and do it!', I will probably punch him in the goddamn face. Another thing is that this fanfic is basically a wish fulfillment, Why do I say this? well first of all the MC is too fukin' strong! unnecessarily at that, like you can just give him a powerful gift but no... you just had to give him another type of power that doesn't belong to that world, Why?! One more is that the MC is basically a retard, he wants to lay low but he answered almost all the questions correctly, I mean come on buddy that's just a retarded move! if you want to lay low just answer 40-50% of the questions! This is also one of the reasons I hate some novels who has MCs laying low but does it in a retarded manner EX: Guy wants to lay low so that he doesn't get noticed, does a physical exam(running) and stays in the middle but after the exam he didn't even pretend to be exhausted while everyone else was panting from exhaustion, like dude! of course your ganna get fucking noticed! Well enough of that, apart from those things it is pretty good, also please don't write anymore singing its horrible. here's a gif of what I think of the fanfic

The_Almighty_Lord
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Reevoo
ReevooLv11

Author seems to understand Novel's Extra quite well, so I was excited for this even though the grammar was nothing to praise. However... it went downhill fast. (FULL OF SPOILERS BELOW) Some things that really bother me are, - The MC curses all the time. Like... In almost every conversation he has, he's going to curse. It just honestly results in an off-putting MC that has a small vocabulary who can't speak without feeling like he's superior to everyone else. - Out of nowhere, we get some real chunni shit dumped into the back story of the MC that becomes his extra powers in this world. Some weird, cringe dragon stuff. He also has other power systems other than mana... that add nothing special to the story. Just another way of making the MC OP. Any enjoyment we could have gotten out of someone using their meta-knowledge to get stronger is instantly taken away as the MC is already one of the strongest in the world... while also at school and doing nothing other than cursing other people out. - Progress is slow. Now, that usually means we see character development with other characters and with the MC, but like I said before, he spends most of his time cursing out other characters and saying the same shit 10 chapters in a row to this OC archer girl. ... However, the banter between the MC and Kim Hajin is actually really good. Even though he starts pushing for character growth from Hajin even though its only been like 3 days... C'mon. Anyway, it's not horrible, but I feel this should be used as a draft for the author to rewrite it without the shitty out of nowhere power up, tone down the cursing and increase the pace of the story.

WiLeYBiGhEaD
WiLeYBiGhEaDLv12

This novel is harder to review for me. When the dialogue between the mc and most of the other characters is happening, the story is enjoyable and immersive. The focus on including lots of character development through dialogue is a strong point of this story. I also think that the portrayal of characters from the world is done well, as they do not feel totally different from the original novel. The world building could use some improvements. It is there but some more introductions to the power scaling and important characters in the world would help. A lot of the time things are introduced but only in name and without context. The pacing is also consistent but could be faster(cutting out olivia alone would have things moving faster). But other times, some sections are inconsistent, feeling forced, lengthy and not flowing with the rest of the story. This mainly happens with the mc’s interactions with the oc character Olivia. I held off on commenting about this in the early chapters and even deleted a comment as the author stated they were trying to inprove things. And while they do improve, it is not enough and still lacks believablility. Olivia is like Sansa Stark in game of thrones in that she doesnt add anything to the story. She constantly anatagonizes the mc, needs help from the mc, and almost every interaction the mc has with her doesn’t fit with how is his character is portrayed in the rest of the story. No one in the story frustrates, angers, or crosses the mcs boundries more than her, but he never acts according to those feelings aside from yelling at her. But he still helps her more than anyone else, even Kim hajun. I have seen friends in toxic relationships(romantic or otherwise) like this and it is frustrating to read when the mc is portrayed as someone who would never put up with this but continously does. After 40 or so chapters the reason for his patience was given as she reminded him of himself, but it is far from enough to explain his inconsistent character. In my personal opinion, Olivia, like Sansa Stark, could have been removed from the story and nothing would be different. In fact it would probably improve the pacing of the story. I wont touch on the excessive cursing, but it is indeed excessive. Overall, I have hope for this story. It is unique and ambitious. The good quality grammer and spelling compared to other fanfics shows the authors care for this work. I really dont like olivia and the mcs interactions with her. I also worry that the author is being to ambitious with the over complicated backstory. But i do like how the backstory actually has meaning and isnt just there to elicit sympathy. In summation, there is some good, some frustrating and a lot of potential. Above average for now but could be much higher and i hope it keeps improving.

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Alex1911Lv6
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