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Emiriot
EmiriotLv44yr
2021-01-27 04:39

Dejando de lado el fondo copiado es decir es un fanfiction ,la historia es exasperante al punto de la idiotez un MC que ni el mismo se entiende demasiado poderoso,parece un mocoso emo que se da golpes de pecho por que se le rompió la uña digo sufrió mucho en fin cada quien tiene su estilo de escritura pero para un fan se nota que personajes como chae nayun fueron de tu desagrado,xD tal vez por eso odio tanto tu historia que siento que es un insulto a todo lo que fue the novel extra esta fue una historia sobre un tipo que se la paso años creciendo,asumiendo errores,acarreando culpas y responsabilidades o sea actuando como un adulto pero aquí vemos a tu mc un tipo desmotivado demasiado poderoso al punto de para que escribes sobre villanos si este se los puede abofetear con un gas,digo ya que sentido le da a un medio emo que mira a todos hacia abajo con la excusa de que no siente nada o que no es su problema,nisiquiera es gracioso no le encuentro el chiste y repito es solo un niño chunni con demasiado poder que se piensa que es el único en el mundo que la pasa mal ,odio tu historia siento que vomitaste en una historia que ame no puedo describir mi decepción

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dvelasquez
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Bueno, lamento leer que te hayas decepcionado, aún así, ¡gracias por tomarte el tiempo de leer y de escribir esta review! Entiendo que no todos tienen los mismos gustos, y es normal. Y no, realmente no odie a Chae Nayun, no como personaje al menos xD esa conclusión la sacaste tú, lo que es irónico considerando que Chae Nayun es literalmente similar a cómo describes a mi personaje "Una niña más fuerte que el resto (su Gift está OP pal carajo usado correctamente, algo dicho por el mismo Kim Hajin, y cuya única diferencia con mi personaje es el tiempo de crecimiento, que como he dicho en muchas ocasiones, no es la primera vez que el viaja a otros mundos, por lo que ya tiene trayectoria, pero esto ya ha sido error mío al no explicarlo desde un inicio o no empezar con alguna aventura previa), que cree que la única que ha sufrido es ella, y que llora porque alguien le menciona al hermano, o qué se le rompió una uña", además de que, en lo personal, ¿para qué hacer un personaje en una novela de fantasía, si no es para hacerlo chuuni? (Pero esa es mi percepción personal de diversión al escribir). Pero te repito, no la odio, y de nuevo, ¡te agradezco por leer la historia y tomarte el tiempo para hacer la reseña! ¡Gracias!

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lJeDl
lJeDlLv1

It ain't that bad, if you can ignore all the cursing and edgy stuff. My problem with the cursing is that there's too much of it, I myself curse daily but not to the extent that every sentence I say contains cursing, basically the MC sounds like a brat who just learned swear words. Another thing I didn't like is the MC being too edgy and a prick all the time, like if my friend just says for me to do things all the time and that if I complain one bit he will get angry at me and says for me to 'just get on with it and do it!', I will probably punch him in the goddamn face. Another thing is that this fanfic is basically a wish fulfillment, Why do I say this? well first of all the MC is too fukin' strong! unnecessarily at that, like you can just give him a powerful gift but no... you just had to give him another type of power that doesn't belong to that world, Why?! One more is that the MC is basically a retard, he wants to lay low but he answered almost all the questions correctly, I mean come on buddy that's just a retarded move! if you want to lay low just answer 40-50% of the questions! This is also one of the reasons I hate some novels who has MCs laying low but does it in a retarded manner EX: Guy wants to lay low so that he doesn't get noticed, does a physical exam(running) and stays in the middle but after the exam he didn't even pretend to be exhausted while everyone else was panting from exhaustion, like dude! of course your ganna get fucking noticed! Well enough of that, apart from those things it is pretty good, also please don't write anymore singing its horrible. here's a gif of what I think of the fanfic

The_Almighty_Lord
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Reevoo
ReevooLv11

Author seems to understand Novel's Extra quite well, so I was excited for this even though the grammar was nothing to praise. However... it went downhill fast. (FULL OF SPOILERS BELOW) Some things that really bother me are, - The MC curses all the time. Like... In almost every conversation he has, he's going to curse. It just honestly results in an off-putting MC that has a small vocabulary who can't speak without feeling like he's superior to everyone else. - Out of nowhere, we get some real chunni shit dumped into the back story of the MC that becomes his extra powers in this world. Some weird, cringe dragon stuff. He also has other power systems other than mana... that add nothing special to the story. Just another way of making the MC OP. Any enjoyment we could have gotten out of someone using their meta-knowledge to get stronger is instantly taken away as the MC is already one of the strongest in the world... while also at school and doing nothing other than cursing other people out. - Progress is slow. Now, that usually means we see character development with other characters and with the MC, but like I said before, he spends most of his time cursing out other characters and saying the same shit 10 chapters in a row to this OC archer girl. ... However, the banter between the MC and Kim Hajin is actually really good. Even though he starts pushing for character growth from Hajin even though its only been like 3 days... C'mon. Anyway, it's not horrible, but I feel this should be used as a draft for the author to rewrite it without the shitty out of nowhere power up, tone down the cursing and increase the pace of the story.

WiLeYBiGhEaD
WiLeYBiGhEaDLv13

This novel is harder to review for me. When the dialogue between the mc and most of the other characters is happening, the story is enjoyable and immersive. The focus on including lots of character development through dialogue is a strong point of this story. I also think that the portrayal of characters from the world is done well, as they do not feel totally different from the original novel. The world building could use some improvements. It is there but some more introductions to the power scaling and important characters in the world would help. A lot of the time things are introduced but only in name and without context. The pacing is also consistent but could be faster(cutting out olivia alone would have things moving faster). But other times, some sections are inconsistent, feeling forced, lengthy and not flowing with the rest of the story. This mainly happens with the mc’s interactions with the oc character Olivia. I held off on commenting about this in the early chapters and even deleted a comment as the author stated they were trying to inprove things. And while they do improve, it is not enough and still lacks believablility. Olivia is like Sansa Stark in game of thrones in that she doesnt add anything to the story. She constantly anatagonizes the mc, needs help from the mc, and almost every interaction the mc has with her doesn’t fit with how is his character is portrayed in the rest of the story. No one in the story frustrates, angers, or crosses the mcs boundries more than her, but he never acts according to those feelings aside from yelling at her. But he still helps her more than anyone else, even Kim hajun. I have seen friends in toxic relationships(romantic or otherwise) like this and it is frustrating to read when the mc is portrayed as someone who would never put up with this but continously does. After 40 or so chapters the reason for his patience was given as she reminded him of himself, but it is far from enough to explain his inconsistent character. In my personal opinion, Olivia, like Sansa Stark, could have been removed from the story and nothing would be different. In fact it would probably improve the pacing of the story. I wont touch on the excessive cursing, but it is indeed excessive. Overall, I have hope for this story. It is unique and ambitious. The good quality grammer and spelling compared to other fanfics shows the authors care for this work. I really dont like olivia and the mcs interactions with her. I also worry that the author is being to ambitious with the over complicated backstory. But i do like how the backstory actually has meaning and isnt just there to elicit sympathy. In summation, there is some good, some frustrating and a lot of potential. Above average for now but could be much higher and i hope it keeps improving.

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