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2022-01-06 14:04

Since he caught me reading the story I'll leave a review detailing what I feel about it so far. One Piece but it's based around the Sky Islands with the Shandians, you say? im sold. This is the kind of story that has something for a special kind of One Piece fan - a really unique story, interesting characters who have depth and amazing development, a high-stakes plot with a gruesome path, and really easy to binge-read. For me, i found the characters to be the highlight of the novel. Especially Amon and Raki. i personally have a thing for motivated souls. So i couldnt help but love them. If you want a novel for Villainy, the synopsis for this novel makes this sound like ‘One Piece,’ but all of the participants are stepping stones for Amon. Don't expect really ruthless, bloodthirsty, cruel antiheroes. Because they arent. Amon is the best the Main Character for this kind of novel who bent the world to his will. I would be really disappointed to see this story be just a guy putting on a facade as a Shandian, more martyr than the true, dark villain I adored him to turn out to be. But luckily Master4thWall here is simply too based when it comes to writing. it starts to get really good in terms of deception and power. Through conquest in fear and dominance. This is exactly what I love when it comes to a more 'Antagonist' character. Not good, yet not pure evil. A man willing to do what it takes to get to the top of the world and hold it within his hands. This work appeals to me, you should take pride in what you've created here. You know the backgrounds of many characters and islands and the world of One Piece and merge it perfectly. I don't come across many people capable of such things. You have a special talent, keep nurturing it.

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Author totally didn't force me....... That aside, the book which currently has 21 chapters is coming along well. One piece fics are quite common but ones with mc of different race is not. Joker started it with his mc as a fishmen and wall here started as a skypiean. Writing Quality- Now the writing quality is pretty decent by webnovel standards and other than minor errors, it is pretty good but can be improved. Word count of each chapter is decent with each being 1500+. Stability- I give this five stars as long as author follows schedule they set whatever it may be but wall even offers bonus chapters which is always welcome. Story Development- Story development as of now is slow paced. Mc doesn't grow op quickly and slowly amasses power. While there are timeskips,they are small ones. We slowly explore the world through mc and see him progress which is refreshing when many compared power fantasy fics here. Character Design- The protagonist, Amon is an interesting character. He is a manipulative guy who is power hungry but he is not the cold type. He acts only when something benefits him but also enjoys what he is doing. His interactions with other characters are done well and overall he is an intriguing character. Coming to the side characters, I feel this is where the story takes a hit. The characters appear fine when they interact with mc but appear kinda stiff when on their own. I feel characters can be fleshed out a bit more and since the story is slow paced, there is plenty of room for improvement. World Background- I wouldn't bother much about world background for fanfics but wall has good knowledge of the source and lore. He explains things well and has done a good job exploring the skypieans and the shandia tribe. Overall a pretty decent fic which has gotten off to a good start and has the potential to be better.

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