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Mzeeddz
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2021-02-16 07:58

Can't say that I enjoyed this novel as much as I did guild wars, but let's begin the analysis. 1- I feel disconected to this novel mostly because the protagonist's emotions don't make sense. He pratically "owned" the world before his death and transmigation to Faust, I won't say he should be a stuck up prick, but there should be at least some pride hidden in there, he should have some negative emotions towards the Goddes who sent him to this world to entertrain her and the goddes's 'dog' (forgot his name, but the system dude), I mean, I understad that it's useless to be angry at the goddes for her emotions, but there should be some anger hidden behind his demeanor, he's basically a toy for her afterall... (I feel like no ammount of being a cold-hearted MC would make that anger dissapear, hiding it would be possible, but making it inexistent is kinda weird...) 2- The story progression kinda sucks, ngl... I feel like things go his way too easily, if the goddes really created this world just for him, she could probably make his life harder, instead he goes to speak with a random bandit leader, he has 10 god level treasures, cuz why not (none of them were duds btw, that situation was unreal af...) and to top all that off when he goes to see the slaves there's a dude with Royal giant blood in his veins, won't even say how absurd that is... 3-The world is interesting at least, there's a few continents that have different settings, for some reason the technology advanced continents haven't enslaved the other continents (wich doesn't make sense, since they have a really advanced techonology level, but hey, magic.) 4-No romance during the free chapters (till c70), for those who were reading for the romance tag. 5-I feel like his system limits him a bit too much, but there's probably gonna be some changes in the future, with system upgrades and shit. 6-Transmutation was done in a bad way... (would say shitty, but that might be offensive so, bad). a) No reason for him not to make better potions... If the supreme version doesn't exist (as the author said in a comment) he could at least go for the highest quality possible, but due to balancing issues we had a protagonist that made a potion just slightly better and didn't give any explanation as to why only went that far. (aka we need more rules for the transmutation skill instead of plotholes) b)A rule that he can only transmute itens that are considered to be of his level would be nice. Ex: Journeyman can only make potions of medium quality and can only transmute things to idk orichalcum ore. The ownership system is weird af too, but sure. 7)I feel like his first scheme, kinda sucks afterall you don't really need to go for the "light" path in a kindgom said to be small af, he could just focus in creating his party and staying low while controlling the market from behind the scenes, but idk politics might help him in the future. Btw forgot to say that using the first scheme to create a 'identity' was total bullshit, no1 knew ppl from other towns in the medieval age, so it would be very easy to create a better indentity he could have gone with the tycon from a different kindgom identity, we all know that the spy network of a small kindgom won't be able to investigate his background that way.

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Devils_Advocate
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Thank you for your long and detailed review. Allow me to address some of your points, not just for you, but also for all those who read your review. (Since it's so long this is part 1/2) 1. Early on it was established that Darius was the type to make plans for a potential afterlife. It was stated that should he lend in Hell, he would get into the Devil's good books and wait for a chance to usurp him. Should he end up in Heaven, he would lead a model life, but if a chance presented itself, he similarly would try to become the top dog. As such, his action of doing as told by the Goddess who can literally just erase his existence doesn't seem like a far stretch. He also does lament his fate every now and them, but the reason he doesn't really curse the Goddess like all the time is mostly his first encounter with CAESAR. As you might recall he threatened to kill Darius in the most painful way, if he ever so much as utters her name in vain. TL;DR just like his character was established he has buried most negative feelings, until reaching a position in which he can effectively do something about it. 2. Let's please not forget that each chapter is somewhere between 1,000-1,200 words, so each chapter is shorter than other novels. Underneath the synopsis Kotario has already warned you about this, though: "Note: This story is slow-paced in order to allow for better world-building and development. If you’re looking for a fast-paced action story, this might not be for you." As for your points, he doesn't talk to a 'random' bandit leader, but to a known 'former' black market seller/smuggler/slave trader. Sure, it might be a bit far-fetched that he has 10 super rare items, however, Luck is a real thing and Darius is not exactly lacking in that area. In the chapter itself it was explained that it's one thing to own such an item and another thing to learn about its true value. Appraisers are already rare and Darius ability is basically a cheat. We also have yet to see how powerful these items actually are and what sorts of hidden side effects they might have. As for the slave, a similar argument applies here. Darius Analyze let's him see things that others can't, in this case the royal blood part. 3. Happy you like the setting, but please don't make conclusions based on your own estimation when we have yet to see more about any of the continents. Don't forget that Darius starts in like a starter area, so we have no idea how powerful these magical kingdoms/empires can be at higher levels. For all we know, Magic > Technology at the Master/Grandmaster stage. 4. True, but the guy is 13 currently, so there will be romance later on. 5. His whole raison d'être is to provide entertainment for Vena and CAESAR, so it was designed to restrict him eventually. But yeah, there will also be changes. The Supreme System says as much when introduced. 6. I wouldn't say in a bad way, but given the questions we get, I admit that it could have been done better. Case in point the higher quality potions. However, just like with my other points there is reason to do so. When he gets them, it's not like he really needs them at that moment. He only has a limited amount of CP each day, so the best option was to use it on more useful stuff, like spells that raise his power drastically. Still, I even mentioned to the author, that it would have been nice to handle it similarly to the spells, so that we would have seen that Common--> Uncommon costs like 2 CP or such. Speaking off, while there is no actual rule preventing him from transmuting things into higher stages, it's basically covered by his CP limit.

Devils_Advocate
Devils_AdvocateModerator

(2/2) The ownership thing is a way for him to get more CP. True it's complicated, but it also has to be, so he can't too easily abuse it. After all, the enjoyment part for those watching him, comes from him struggling. They don't want him to easily breeze through everything. 7. Again, you are using your own conclusions in a world you don't yet know much about. As we see in the most recent chapters, his scheme was indeed necessary, as someone had actually paid others to research his origins. Final remark; Although you admitted to not enjoying this as much as Guild Wars, I would welcome you to read further. (as I understand you only read ch. 1-70) Once again, let me thank you for taking the time to write your review. :)

Kotario
KotarioAuthor

That's unfortunate, and thank you for sharing your concerns. I'll certainly keep them in mind going forward.

45unifol21
45unifol21Lv15

I don't believe the world was created 'for him'. I think Vena means that sarcastically in the sense of 'you are just the latest in a long line of protags, now bark like a dog for me' Perhaps I'm wrong?

horrendous_potato
horrendous_potatoLv4

I can't get over the fact that you all keep calling it CP. gives me a little chuckle every time I see someone type that.

Devils_Advocate:(2/2) The ownership thing is a way for him to get more CP. True it's complicated, but it also has to be, so he can't too easily abuse it. After all, the enjoyment part for those watching him, comes from him struggling. They don't want him to easily breeze through everything. 7. Again, you are using your own conclusions in a world you don't yet know much about. As we see in the most recent chapters, his scheme was indeed necessary, as someone had actually paid others to research his origins. Final remark; Although you admitted to not enjoying this as much as Guild Wars, I would welcome you to read further. (as I understand you only read ch. 1-70) Once again, let me thank you for taking the time to write your review. :)
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Kotario
KotarioAuthor

So, it's the proverbial Author's review. Now, let me use this limited and much-visited space to clarify some things for those who are yet to read and those who have begun reading but are likely confused about some things. 1. In this novel, you are mostly spoonfed things, but a wealth of things are also left for you to read in between the lines. This novel was written with the intention of appealing to a thoughtful crowd, so erm... please make sure you fit that category. 2. Darius Stone, the MC, is not an edgelord as many expected from the synopsis. The comparison to Leylin Farlier from Warlock of the Magus world was not referring to their personalities or logical choices, but their moral choices. Unfortunately, some fellows came in hoping to see Leylin V2.0, not Darius Stone. 3. Darius is - as they say - isekai'd. Yes, but please - and absolutely keep this in mind as it is the whole point of the plot - he is not done so freely. He is brought to the world of Faust with a goal in mind, and majority of the actions he takes - whether you like it or not, or whether you feel its smart or not - are geared towards fulfilling that goal, which is to amuse the one who reincarnated him. 4, Please, for the love of God, hide your arrogance and ego. yes, the suggestions you made as to loopholes with the ability he acquires are grand, but you aren't the only one who can do 1+1. I, and the create/characters in the novel, can certainly think that far, and if it's not implemented, it means it likely would not work. This is in regard to the system mechanism as well as the ability. 5. If the above-mentioned things have bothered you, please use this as an official clarification for your doubts. If they haven't, please keep an eye out for them and when you encounter them, remember my words. It would make much more sense when you do. Thanks for reading so far. If you have read a bit and want to leave some praises, you can also make a review or let me know in the replies here or in comments (chapter and paragraph) in the novel. If you have criticisms, you can also leave those, and I will investigate and either give you an explanation, gratitude, or apology depending on the validity. If you are part of the typical crowd who like to insult first and think later, you are also free to leave whatever comments you have wherever. Just beware that, heh, I also insult back, and quite scathingly at that.

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