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HintermeierChristi
HintermeierChristiLv153yr
2021-10-31 17:20

The backround story isn´t bad I hope later it answered why the MC was able to get back in time. And the MC is likeable but I wonder why when his family is so much worth to him why he doesn´t talk to his sister. Bad points are : - The author makes the MC with quest rewards so OP but then scale the opponent in his level range up so that the MC has to take effort to kill them. He totally forgot what this would mean if other players would to fight against such opponents. - You could forget at minimum one digit in all stats, hp etc. -To often are the stats of the MC postet and the fights mostly are damage report.

The Ancients World

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4.6
674 Chs

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This is an accurate observation of bad qualities in my novel. Addressed in a respectful way, thanks for the review.

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easyread
easyreadAuthor

I just want to say hello to all the people coming from my other work here on webnovel. I have deleted the 3 other 5 star reviews that this has gotten because I want people to start leaving reviews only after I reach chapter 50. I hope by this time I can get a translator and nobody has to use google translate, this way unbiased reviews about the writing quality can be posted. The story is easy to read and there are very rarely spelling or punctuation errors. If I miss spell a word or need to fix some math, just say the word or math problem in the paragraph comment and I'll fix. No need to write anything other than that. Please don't leave comments about the lore of gods and other deities. I have changed and described them differently in the story than in real life. Don't read if that offends you. Please only leave comments about characters, locations, story development and history of both the real world or Ancients World. I will delete any comments pertaining to 'Logic' or 'Grammar'. The story is very well written and there is little to no reason at all to complain. Hope you all enjoy the story and have a great day!!

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Messier
MessierLv15

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3yr
Kapteyn
KapteynLv14

Overall, a very entertaining story. The Author got a nice way to develop his view of the overused theme VRMMORPG + Reborn MC + OP Knowledge/stats and mixes elements of many different styles. I'll try to summarize without spoilers: PROs: * Elements mixed from Game stories, apocaliptical stories, RPG, etc. * Good background construction and use of background elements - author could make a better descriptions of citys and sites the MC visits, like describing architeture, climate, but, even so, it's not bad the way it is now. * There are many misteries about the world and development of the story, but the author answers a part of this relatively fast. New dramas are constructed in a smooth way, so that we readers keep entertained. CONs: * Writing quality at the beggining is poor, with a lot of grammar errors. It gets better, especialy after 100 chapters. *MC, sometimes, makes stupid decisions, and repeat some nonsenses. In regards of personality, I guess it's ok (there are times i think he looks to be a psyco). But, stuff like having inventory function, and always hunting for food, even knowing that he cant cook. BTW, he could buy any cooking skill in his travels, or some seasoning! * Author has a nasty habit of tricking his readers with comments outside the author's comment area, and using excessively stat and quest views to increase word count and get paid for text that shouldn't be in the story. BTW, this practice makes me not give 5 stars in all the stories I rate with this practice when they go premium.

3yr
Blackwater
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Duck_God
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krialder
krialderLv15

This book is very refreshing. It isn’t your typical overused story type with the same repetitive characters that you read in way too many books. The background is well-thought, the characters are likeable, but they also have their edges, which is part of their charm for me. The best part for me is that the book/the author hasn’t reached his full potential and you can see the grow throughout the chapters. I have to belittle that the chapters are a little messy in the start, and there are a few spelling mistakes. The first one improves a lot and the second one isn’t that obstructive. All in all, please give this book a chance!!! I think it is really worth the time

4yr
ReadingExMachina
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The only real weak point I can see in this story is the grammar (not that I am an expet). But that can easily be corrected and do not pose any real problem to the comprehension of the story. The world background is unique enough but a bit too vague. It feels like some important informations about it are still hidden, living us "starving" for them. I do not know if this is intentional or not but it add some "addictive" sensation, keeping me hoocked to the world in general. Character wise, I don’t really know how to rate them, because I read so many books, that nothing feel new apart from mentally unstable characters (and I don’t know how to feel about that) but I will give it a plus because the author is working hard to give them feel "human", unlike many novel were you are left wondering how people can still live in a world full of psychos. The story feels a bit slow at some moment, and normal at others. I will give it a plus because it never feel too fast and I personally like that. I don’t know if the feeling of slowness is due to this "starved for information" one or because somtime it feel like there are less pages available to read than normal, but as it don’t really affect how I like this novel, it is only a small negative point. Taht’s it for my review. I am not a professional and it is largely made from my perspective and as such is a little biased. Have a nice day!

4yr
CodeSpectre
CodeSpectreLv4

This book's amazing !!!! I'm thoroughly confused about how this book isn't popular yet !!!! I don't really have any problems with the story 50+ chapters in so please do read it because you will not be disappointed !!!!

4yr
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