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BlackwaterLv114yr
2021-03-20 03:50

The story itself is not bad, it's a bit of a different take on your typical VR story. I'm personally just not a fan of the POV changes, the Family dynamic or the long traveling arcs. But that's more a personal preference than a criticism of the story itself. A major thing that bugged me is the lack of line brakes like : --------- or …......... for a new POV shift or the transition from Game to real-world, it is not necessary but it makes reading much simpler. An other point is the lack of reason, i didn't get a clear backstory of the MC or most of his family, 61 ch. into the story and we basically don't know much of why he is doing what he is doing. Was 5 years into the future really so bad ? What is his motivation? Without at least a better driving force it feels like the MC is just a kid that plays the game and makes a bit if money nothing more. And last but not least, the mental Age of the MC . How old is he exactly? The way he handles his Family issues make me think that he is mentally no older than maybe 20. That isn't in line with someone who has gone thru hard times and lost his family. But all in all upuntil this point the story is good, it's more my personal preference that is a bit different and I enjoy his actions in the game more than any of the IRL interaction he has. will read more the next few days. 4/5 stars

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This is what criticism should look like, if anyone wants to actually leave me a review critiquing this is how you should do it. Respectfully and logically, thank you for the review.

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knijn
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i was wondering why it was rated so high...

easyread:This is what criticism should look like, if anyone wants to actually leave me a review critiquing this is how you should do it. Respectfully and logically, thank you for the review.
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for real. do you just delete the reviews that are negative?

knijn:i was wondering why it was rated so high...
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