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emashes195
emashes195Lv33yr
2022-01-24 03:36

I really like your story.The world background and the lore is really interesting and the mystery is alright too. But just one problem i have. As of now im at chapter 178. And recently the MC is becoming less and less likeable. He is someone who stole a class that isnt supposed to be his. His actions brought in a lot of consequences resulting in billions of lives being at stake, and he knows it. But our MC who is supposed to be a humble dude keep running away from his responsabilities. And he justifies it with "i have free will". Yep you have free will. But when you nake a choice, you gotta deal with the consequences that come with it. Also what is his deal with him and killing people? Just because they know your identity he is gonna kill everybody, even though not all of them are hostile to you? Dude is supposed to be humble even though he is 24/7 being an as* and being rude to people. Really want to read your book, but if i dont like the MC, it really put off my reading enjoyement, wich is a pity because like i said your book is really good.

The Ancients World

easyread
4.6
674 Chs

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Plamler
PlamlerLv5

It turns into this? That is sad af. Why would the author make this worldly and humble MC that talks about how much of a shame it is that other People are not helping putThe struggles of the destitute, just to turn him into some ruthless secretive hypocrite.

2yr
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easyread
easyreadAuthor

I just want to say hello to all the people coming from my other work here on webnovel. I have deleted the 3 other 5 star reviews that this has gotten because I want people to start leaving reviews only after I reach chapter 50. I hope by this time I can get a translator and nobody has to use google translate, this way unbiased reviews about the writing quality can be posted. The story is easy to read and there are very rarely spelling or punctuation errors. If I miss spell a word or need to fix some math, just say the word or math problem in the paragraph comment and I'll fix. No need to write anything other than that. Please don't leave comments about the lore of gods and other deities. I have changed and described them differently in the story than in real life. Don't read if that offends you. Please only leave comments about characters, locations, story development and history of both the real world or Ancients World. I will delete any comments pertaining to 'Logic' or 'Grammar'. The story is very well written and there is little to no reason at all to complain. Hope you all enjoy the story and have a great day!!

4yr

Messier
MessierLv15

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3yr
Kapteyn
KapteynLv14

Overall, a very entertaining story. The Author got a nice way to develop his view of the overused theme VRMMORPG + Reborn MC + OP Knowledge/stats and mixes elements of many different styles. I'll try to summarize without spoilers: PROs: * Elements mixed from Game stories, apocaliptical stories, RPG, etc. * Good background construction and use of background elements - author could make a better descriptions of citys and sites the MC visits, like describing architeture, climate, but, even so, it's not bad the way it is now. * There are many misteries about the world and development of the story, but the author answers a part of this relatively fast. New dramas are constructed in a smooth way, so that we readers keep entertained. CONs: * Writing quality at the beggining is poor, with a lot of grammar errors. It gets better, especialy after 100 chapters. *MC, sometimes, makes stupid decisions, and repeat some nonsenses. In regards of personality, I guess it's ok (there are times i think he looks to be a psyco). But, stuff like having inventory function, and always hunting for food, even knowing that he cant cook. BTW, he could buy any cooking skill in his travels, or some seasoning! * Author has a nasty habit of tricking his readers with comments outside the author's comment area, and using excessively stat and quest views to increase word count and get paid for text that shouldn't be in the story. BTW, this practice makes me not give 5 stars in all the stories I rate with this practice when they go premium.

3yr
Blackwater
BlackwaterLv11

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3yr
Duck_God
Duck_GodLv5

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krialder
krialderLv15

This book is very refreshing. It isn’t your typical overused story type with the same repetitive characters that you read in way too many books. The background is well-thought, the characters are likeable, but they also have their edges, which is part of their charm for me. The best part for me is that the book/the author hasn’t reached his full potential and you can see the grow throughout the chapters. I have to belittle that the chapters are a little messy in the start, and there are a few spelling mistakes. The first one improves a lot and the second one isn’t that obstructive. All in all, please give this book a chance!!! I think it is really worth the time

3yr
ReadingExMachina
ReadingExMachinaLv14

The only real weak point I can see in this story is the grammar (not that I am an expet). But that can easily be corrected and do not pose any real problem to the comprehension of the story. The world background is unique enough but a bit too vague. It feels like some important informations about it are still hidden, living us "starving" for them. I do not know if this is intentional or not but it add some "addictive" sensation, keeping me hoocked to the world in general. Character wise, I don’t really know how to rate them, because I read so many books, that nothing feel new apart from mentally unstable characters (and I don’t know how to feel about that) but I will give it a plus because the author is working hard to give them feel "human", unlike many novel were you are left wondering how people can still live in a world full of psychos. The story feels a bit slow at some moment, and normal at others. I will give it a plus because it never feel too fast and I personally like that. I don’t know if the feeling of slowness is due to this "starved for information" one or because somtime it feel like there are less pages available to read than normal, but as it don’t really affect how I like this novel, it is only a small negative point. Taht’s it for my review. I am not a professional and it is largely made from my perspective and as such is a little biased. Have a nice day!

4yr
CodeSpectre
CodeSpectreLv4

This book's amazing !!!! I'm thoroughly confused about how this book isn't popular yet !!!! I don't really have any problems with the story 50+ chapters in so please do read it because you will not be disappointed !!!!

3yr
I_like_salad
I_like_saladLv11

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2yr
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