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ReadingExMachina
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2021-01-19 22:08

The only real weak point I can see in this story is the grammar (not that I am an expet). But that can easily be corrected and do not pose any real problem to the comprehension of the story. The world background is unique enough but a bit too vague. It feels like some important informations about it are still hidden, living us "starving" for them. I do not know if this is intentional or not but it add some "addictive" sensation, keeping me hoocked to the world in general. Character wise, I don’t really know how to rate them, because I read so many books, that nothing feel new apart from mentally unstable characters (and I don’t know how to feel about that) but I will give it a plus because the author is working hard to give them feel "human", unlike many novel were you are left wondering how people can still live in a world full of psychos. The story feels a bit slow at some moment, and normal at others. I will give it a plus because it never feel too fast and I personally like that. I don’t know if the feeling of slowness is due to this "starved for information" one or because somtime it feel like there are less pages available to read than normal, but as it don’t really affect how I like this novel, it is only a small negative point. Taht’s it for my review. I am not a professional and it is largely made from my perspective and as such is a little biased. Have a nice day!

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I'm sorry for the starved feeling, but I am purposefully doing this so people can draw their own conclusions. I want the story to have deep lore of the world both in real life and in game. I'm doing the best I can character wise, but everyone knows that's the hardest part of a story. Thank you for leaving a well thought out and descriptive review, I'm glad that you have spent time reading this story despite me being a new author with only one other story on my belt.

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