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YunickLv54yr
2020-10-08 00:14

The first eight chapters are great and i would give a 5 stars if only I based on the first 8 chapters but after 9 is absolute trash he author go crazy after 9 ruining the history i never felt so frustrated with a author before, maybe the author of hunterxhunter too, but for the first time in my life I'm going to give someone a bad review after years on webnovel. I never liked to do it but this time he deserve it

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Shem_SamaLv1

Dude I suggest you continue the author latest chapters..I too find it annoying but after that chap it gets good again.

CodezLLv4

but it already happened once, and we all know that it will happen again ...

Shem_Sama:Dude I suggest you continue the author latest chapters..I too find it annoying but after that chap it gets good again.
AleccrimDLv4

O que aconteceu exatamente?

CodezL:but it already happened once, and we all know that it will happen again ...
ElderLv11

You didn't read 39. There mc fine with kiling thousand in a capital for some random guy ruining his kiss with crazy girl. Who wanted to blow up a Sity... This chapter show that author fuc.ked up hard.

TOFIELv3

Shows how idiotic the story is in general. I just needed to read-only that chapter to see how bad it is.

Elder:You didn't read 39. There mc fine with kiling thousand in a capital for some random guy ruining his kiss with crazy girl. Who wanted to blow up a Sity... This chapter show that author fuc.ked up hard.
Deadrule_vivekLv5

apparently every one in akatsuki have 1000 times more damage than him...he only killed young master and his possies ...and property damage but no innocent lives were taken, also that person wanted to have *** with Konan forcefully so what now ? a dude shouldn't even protect his gf? or are you into this cuck fetish where you let your girl ****ed by any random mob A? do remember that while escaping konoha they bombed an entire village..they are not goody 2 shoes but more of villanous protagonists

Elder:You didn't read 39. There mc fine with kiling thousand in a capital for some random guy ruining his kiss with crazy girl. Who wanted to blow up a Sity... This chapter show that author fuc.ked up hard.
QohLv2

So he starts training in like 100 chaps or 200.. ur mc sucks badly bruh I’m actually laughing about how your mc has konan around his finger and he is not even stronger I think konan should be the mc since u want her to be stronger than him so bad. Did u get carried all your life? sucked are u an adolescent? Are u an mommy’s boy no need to hurt your feelings but u need to retire smh no point in arguing

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Rafael_MendezLv1

Pos a mi me gustó mucho

StrikingWaveLv3

Macho man.

Qoh:So he starts training in like 100 chaps or 200.. ur mc sucks badly bruh I’m actually laughing about how your mc has konan around his finger and he is not even stronger I think konan should be the mc since u want her to be stronger than him so bad. Did u get carried all your life? sucked are u an adolescent? Are u an mommy’s boy no need to hurt your feelings but u need to retire smh no point in arguing
StrikingWaveLv3

Reading Comprehension: -1000

Elder:You didn't read 39. There mc fine with kiling thousand in a capital for some random guy ruining his kiss with crazy girl. Who wanted to blow up a Sity... This chapter show that author fuc.ked up hard.
Triple_xLv10

So when is the r18 scene?

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TempeGorengLv4

santai bang wkwkkw

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Robert_DeskinsLv1

I have a book recommendation for you- "On Writing: A Memoir of the Craft" by Steven King, it is mostly just him talking about his life but the end of the book is creative writing advice from a trained highschool English teacher/college creative writing teacher who is also one of the most successful fictional authors in history.... A preface quote he used in that book was "to write is human, to edit is devine"

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T1tanzLv4

santai bro😅

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KYS_2Lv1

yeah. no story is perfect... If you stop reading something just because theres one or two flaws in it, thats just stupid imo.

CodezL:but it already happened once, and we all know that it will happen again ...
CodezLLv4

It is not one or two defects, it is the core of the story, if that is wrong then the rest of the story will be too, I don't usually turn off the brain while reading, that is stupid.

KYS_2:yeah. no story is perfect... If you stop reading something just because theres one or two flaws in it, thats just stupid imo.
KYS_2Lv1

What would you consider the core of the story then?

CodezL:It is not one or two defects, it is the core of the story, if that is wrong then the rest of the story will be too, I don't usually turn off the brain while reading, that is stupid.
CodezLLv4

In this story, the union of souls directly affects the core of the story, which is the relationship of the protagonist with his love interests and their power base, the decision of the union of souls will directly and completely affect the whole history of ff.

KYS_2:What would you consider the core of the story then?
KYS_2Lv1

but its a fanfiction... There is no real 'sole' plot to it since its just an extension of an already planned and original idea. The union of souls were most likely to keep damsel in distress situations to a minimum when it came to the love interests. I understand how it can be annoying and unlikable but it is quite nice for the lovers to be strong.

CodezL:In this story, the union of souls directly affects the core of the story, which is the relationship of the protagonist with his love interests and their power base, the decision of the union of souls will directly and completely affect the whole history of ff.
CodezLLv4

the union of souls itself does not bother me, the annoying thing is that the author took the only thing from the mc that made him special and gave it to everyone else while he did not get anything.

KYS_2:but its a fanfiction... There is no real 'sole' plot to it since its just an extension of an already planned and original idea. The union of souls were most likely to keep damsel in distress situations to a minimum when it came to the love interests. I understand how it can be annoying and unlikable but it is quite nice for the lovers to be strong.
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