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Midnights_Slave
Midnights_SlaveLv134yr
2020-08-22 22:11

This story is great. Why hasn't it been picked yet? The main character isn't stupid. The plot is excellent. There may be a little plagiarism in plot but not in substance. Lots of time jumps though. By chapter 60 we are over 300 years into the 500 so I want to know what happens next. Can the powers that be pick this story please.

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Heretoc
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The story is absurd. I am currently at chapter 110 and all I can say is this story is a waste of brain cells. Not going to suggest this story to anyone. It starts with a scenario similar to Everyone else is a returnee. But that's it. The story just goes off tangent and stops making any sense. To give you an idea I will briefly explain what the **** has me ranting about. MC is a loner invisible guy. Time stops and he is left alone. He spends 300 years acting as an idiot. Instead of training his skill or enjoying himself, all you find him is crying about his past and how he seems to forget everything. Fine. We can understand that MC is depressed and so on. But 300 years? And let's not forget all the time skips. Author just out of nowhere drops a time skip. 10 yeast passed, they practiced for 20 years...it's annoying. And then you have the author mucking about. She's trying for comedic effects, but he is trying so hard that all that comes out is depression. God Realm where the arc stops making any sense. It's so wrong....I don't even know what to say. You have mind locks, NPCs and other stuff which just DO NOT merge well into the story. And when people do come alive the story just goes bat **** insane. Do you remember how hard was it to find magic stones? Well, the story starts and you have 'The player who first entered the game.' Do you get it? Player who entered the game. You don't have people awakening and then hyperventilating because every thing is wrong. Nope. It's a game . The first player than purchases magic stones, few million magic stones mind you. WTF? Are you writing a VR game novel or are you talking about real world. You don't have anyone rioting, crying, screaming. No cults preaching Apocalypse. No military efforts to bring every thing in control. No common man trying to kill himself because he just list everything. Nope. It's just another day. Everything is normal. People immediate adapted to this whole fucking game world. You already have guild and villages. Hunters using mechas and what not. Like seriously? If all you wanted was a game world then why didn't the **** you just created a VR novel. No sense of realism. And if that wasn't enough. The same MC who was crying for his crush and his parents, didn't even think about visiting them. It's not like I wish he would. But what's with all this inconsistent character development. After chapter 100, when people awaken, the MC starts acting like an NPC. Which honestly makes no sense. If it was like they legendary Mechanic where he acted like NPC to earn benefits, I could under. But this ...rubbish. All I cay say is : Waste of time. It's just around 250 chapters long but I was already feeling drowsy 100 chapters in. The stupid change was just the final hammer. Not going to suggest this story. Ever.

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