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Gravedagger
GravedaggerLv55yr
2020-02-10 10:38

The story is good I like the concept of the MC the problem is the way the MC act is not concise with his background. Imagine an MC who is a lab rat in his previous world and only know Manga and Onepeice as the definition of reality would he trust strangers the first time he met them? Of course not! but this MC is like that he kept telling his Secret left and right and what's more it's annoying how it's handled it's not a bad idea to have a naive and honest MC but common its One Piece World where corrupt marines and pirates rules..It just doesn't make sense at all.. Luffy is the only exception to the rules, and even that his naivety is handled quite nicely.. Anyways I've stop reading for now.. I'll prolly continue if the story becomes interesting later on. Well, Good luck to the author. He will need it as I assume there will be a lot of haters because of how the MC is. But please continue and improve, again Good Luck. 😁😁

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LittleApple
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thx

Abu_abdillah_Muadz
Abu_abdillah_MuadzLv1

Benar mc nya harus merasakan kekalahan atau seseorang yang dia sayangi terluka supaya gk naif lagi. Terkadang terlalu op mc itu mudah jadi lalai dan sombong kayak mc xiaxia. Jgn buat mc nya murni polos trus nanti dimanfaatkan ribet masalahnya trus tangkap pokemon nya jgn sering2 dibatasi perdunia. Juga termasuk one piece semua wanita kamu tangkap. Yg dipilih yang paling bagus aja jgn semua nanti kamu bigung ngahirin ceritanya gmn saking banyaknya wanitanya. Buat fokus utama adalah pertumbuhan mc nya dari kekuatan kepribadian pendirian kemauan. Penulis kamu nulis will MC luar biasa tapi kok polos dan naif mc mu. Tolong lebih baik dibenahi semua dari awal ceritanya bagus sebenarnya jadi tolong direvisi. Terima kasih

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