Conversation between characters doesnt really amount to anything, info dumps here and there, no clear character development, pacing of the plot and story is really bad, not sure if the MC is too stupid or naive, the interaction between characters are so fake, wrong use of pronouns, errors on grammar here and there. Had a good theme for the story maybe you can reboot it and do proofreading.
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That is the problem like he had high iq even before the he had the system yet he forgets in the heavens lost property the first question about the difference between gender but he still said the same thing like i know you can be dumb but not this dumb and i feel most the same and his story too like damn you should know this **** like what he don't read webtoon god of highschool mori jin the monkey king like bruh i am a die hard fan of sun wukong like the place he got the staff is almost the same as the og but still different and i also believe that he should know about people dying because he is a walking panacea and he reads and watch anime like one piece has death and killing too and like how does he still not understand the difference between boy and girl after the heavens lost property like he should already know and he should have gotten it because you know the author said he is smart but still can't learn the difference like wtf are you stating your not stating facts but like lies he should know.
Wow I sound like an idot now, reading this. hello it is me from the future
MonkeReviewer:That is the problem like he had high iq even before the he had the system yet he forgets in the heavens lost property the first question about the difference between gender but he still said the same thing like i know you can be dumb but not this dumb and i feel most the same and his story too like damn you should know this **** like what he don't read webtoon god of highschool mori jin the monkey king like bruh i am a die hard fan of sun wukong like the place he got the staff is almost the same as the og but still different and i also believe that he should know about people dying because he is a walking panacea and he reads and watch anime like one piece has death and killing too and like how does he still not understand the difference between boy and girl after the heavens lost property like he should already know and he should have gotten it because you know the author said he is smart but still can't learn the difference like wtf are you stating your not stating facts but like lies he should know.
