To keep it simple, good idea, bad grammar. I recommend this to new people in the fanfic world, because if you have read many good fanfics you may not read this because of the grammatical errors and that would be a shame of a possible good history.
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Well, thanks for the review and for not insulting. The truth is that the "rewritten" I did was a long time ago, and I did it only with the google translator, it is my first novel that I wrote and I did not know that when translating it the translator changes many words. The first 20 chapters more or less sucks, and then it improves a bit, since I made them with Grammarly. I'll fix the chapters later if I can, and I'm really sorry if you couldn't read it.
You better work to change the grammar of the first chapters, because, the way it is, it's unreadable. A lot of wrong pronouns like; he, she. The most important chapters are the first, they show what to expect from the novel, if it's bad then the rest is also.
If you're interested in the bakugan, someone wrote a fanfic about the bakugan and it made me feel very nostalgic. The fanfic is called "bakugan: rise of the half bakugan", if you have time, I would appreciate it if you could take a look and write your personal opinions in the comments. they are called authors, but their articles do not stand out because there is not much interaction. I'm a writer too, so I'm posting some fanfictions with comments so you can feel better. I am writing this message because I am afraid that if he feels that what he has written is not taken into account, he will leave. If you enjoy this fanfic like me, you will make me very happy if you direct others to this fanfic. Thanks if you've read this far. (and my english is not very good so sorry for the typos.)
