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David_Drake
David_DrakeLv45yr
2020-01-21 08:54

So the synopsis is really misleading. Apparently Snape travels through realities saves his parallel self and sends her into his timeline when he was a kid. Now the MC is actually a female twin of Snape. This is really important as you have no idea until chp 3 the gender of the FL. Anyway this gets 3 stars as I dropped it due to your misdirection.

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David_Drake
David_DrakeLv4

Also you got to delete all these spam 5 star comments. It isn't helping your image.

50ShadesOfAss
50ShadesOfAssLv14

Thanks for saving my time. Really don’t like fem mc

John_Doe12
John_Doe12Lv3

Did you read the same fan-fic as me? Because It is blatantly obvious that it was a female lead even from the get-go. Also, there was no misdirection. You just assumed wrongly.

David_Drake
David_DrakeLv4

Nope, it seemed like a multi lead at the beginning with snape as a MC.

John_Doe12:Did you read the same fan-fic as me? Because It is blatantly obvious that it was a female lead even from the get-go. Also, there was no misdirection. You just assumed wrongly.
darkchocolate59
darkchocolate59Lv4

Although I found your critique a little harsh, I agree that the summary is overly vague and I appreciated your short explanation. It was exactly what I was looking for down in the comments. Thank you.

Sphell
SphellLv4

Um so I scrolled through the reviews and found yours. I decided to check the book out anyways despite your review and it’s obvious that the MC is a girl? It literally starts as, “Rowan lets out a groan as she opened her eyes...” emphasis on the SHE and HER. But, I suppose you have a point about the vague synopsis. Personally, I actually find the synopsis interesting as it makes me want to know what happens, as it should. Anyways, that’s just my opinion. Thanks for the review though! (๑>◡<๑)

Kurosis
KurosisLv4

thank you for the warning <3

MIKK
MIKKLv11

There is no misdirection, you just assumed that the main lead would be snape because he appeared and he's a male, typically the lead in most fanfics.

David_Drake
David_DrakeLv4

So your reasoning is way off. It doesn't matter what gender the lead is and pulling the 'male card' is pretty bigoted of you. Anyway, as I stated before I believe that the author made it too confusing to know who was MC of this story until a few chapters in. A few chapters others have thank me for my warning.

MIKK:There is no misdirection, you just assumed that the main lead would be snape because he appeared and he's a male, typically the lead in most fanfics.
MIKK
MIKKLv11

Maybe its just me, but it was pretty clear to see who the MC was. Anyone with basic thematic ideas on storytelling would know that it was a girl, regardless - I'm not basing your review, I just failed to understand how it was hard to see the MC was fem. (also how is that bigoted? it was literally an observation made on my experiences on reading fanfiction, most fanfics tend to have male leads - the exception being romance fics. That holds true for this website too, there was no 'male card' pulled lmao.)

David_Drake:So your reasoning is way off. It doesn't matter what gender the lead is and pulling the 'male card' is pretty bigoted of you. Anyway, as I stated before I believe that the author made it too confusing to know who was MC of this story until a few chapters in. A few chapters others have thank me for my warning.
Blake_Chronos
Blake_ChronosLv3

No gender bender tag...

Game
GameLv15

Thank you for the Warning, I like to read books imagining myself as the MC, I am unable to do so for female MC's.

Batcard
BatcardLv14

Whats wrong with a female lead?

No_Name_desu
No_Name_desuLv4

Well, not all story started with MC point of view, so I thought the MC is male as well even though the story started with female point of view because the sinop talking about the boy who live, so.. yeah... Oh I read Sherlock Holmes a bit in the past and through the book, I remember it's mostly not the amazing detective POV, but his buddy doctor instead....

Sphell:Um so I scrolled through the reviews and found yours. I decided to check the book out anyways despite your review and it’s obvious that the MC is a girl? It literally starts as, “Rowan lets out a groan as she opened her eyes...” emphasis on the SHE and HER. But, I suppose you have a point about the vague synopsis. Personally, I actually find the synopsis interesting as it makes me want to know what happens, as it should. Anyways, that’s just my opinion. Thanks for the review though! (๑>◡<๑)
DarkKnight32
DarkKnight32Lv6

drama, no goals, emotionally unstable mc, the mc does things that are just stright up dumb.

Batcard:Whats wrong with a female lead?
Rattelbitte
RattelbitteLv4

Thanks you save my time

David_Drake
David_DrakeLv4

No problem

Rattelbitte:Thanks you save my time
GokuSayan
GokuSayanLv4

To say that only the female protagonists have that is to laugh out loud. I can tell you that there are many male leads with the same problems. MGA, AGT, ED to name a few.

DarkKnight32:drama, no goals, emotionally unstable mc, the mc does things that are just stright up dumb.
Luffy_For_The_Win
Luffy_For_The_WinLv4

I think you guys can understand his point if you think of the authors that messaging up the gender words such as he and her. I have read many books where it is hard to track the gender of characters due to this problem. funny enough, there were times I read a book thinking the protagonist was female until half way through when the author just says something like"at least my d*co is still alright". completely threw me off until I realized it was either the author's fault grammar or the translator just didn't care enough to check his own translations.

TeaTop
TeaTopLv13

I won't be wasting my time then.

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123r97Lv1

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Sycamore
SycamoreLv3

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