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skulputulurubug
skulputulurubugLv144yr
2020-07-09 02:06

This is pretty much what you should expect when a woman writes a book with a female mc they're able to put themselves in their characters shoes so you can expect drama lots and lots of drama the mc acts cold but the drama will always be there, as a male reader it's hard to place yourself as mc since a woman is much more complex, as I observed males are more goal oriented when they are mc as such no matter the personality their aims are clear. As for women her goal was to save this world and severus but her goals aren't set. As a male reader some of her actions confuse me a lot since she acts cold and aloof but she's emotionally unstable..

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DocMic
DocMicLv4

Blep

Barnacleboy
BarnacleboyLv15

Ummmm sexist…. Its called bad writing not girls are by polor

skulputulurubug
skulputulurubugLv14

It's not sexist gender difference exists for a reason

Barnacleboy:Ummmm sexist…. Its called bad writing not girls are by polor
Barnacleboy
BarnacleboyLv15

I never said that they dont exist but that doesnt mean a man cant understand a woman because shes emotionally complex. And to say men are generally more goal oriented is correct because its true but its just ‘generally’. That doesnt mean the auther couldnt write a book because she cant relate to male audiences because shes female as i said in the previous comment its called ‘bad writing’

skulputulurubug:It's not sexist gender difference exists for a reason
skulputulurubug
skulputulurubugLv14

Have you even read this book? Why would you judge it as bad writing?

Barnacleboy:I never said that they dont exist but that doesnt mean a man cant understand a woman because shes emotionally complex. And to say men are generally more goal oriented is correct because its true but its just ‘generally’. That doesnt mean the auther couldnt write a book because she cant relate to male audiences because shes female as i said in the previous comment its called ‘bad writing’
skulputulurubug
skulputulurubugLv14

should've just made your own review if you hated it, cause I'm interested in this book

Barnacleboy:I never said that they dont exist but that doesnt mean a man cant understand a woman because shes emotionally complex. And to say men are generally more goal oriented is correct because its true but its just ‘generally’. That doesnt mean the auther couldnt write a book because she cant relate to male audiences because shes female as i said in the previous comment its called ‘bad writing’
Barnacleboy
BarnacleboyLv15

Im so glad u like the book friend. It warms my heart to know that people online can come together and support novels that need that it. God bless

skulputulurubug:should've just made your own review if you hated it, cause I'm interested in this book
West_Knight
West_KnightLv13

lol really cant tell if you are fricking with them here

Barnacleboy:Im so glad u like the book friend. It warms my heart to know that people online can come together and support novels that need that it. God bless
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Adam_Clinton
Adam_ClintonLv13

It's not necessarily true for men and women in real life, but I think it's true when it comes to main characters for books. Books with female leads tend to be based around a whole lot of drama, whereas books with male leads tend to be based around the mc pursuing some goal.

Barnacleboy:Ummmm sexist…. Its called bad writing not girls are by polor
BoredCrow
BoredCrowLv3

facts

Adam_Clinton:It's not necessarily true for men and women in real life, but I think it's true when it comes to main characters for books. Books with female leads tend to be based around a whole lot of drama, whereas books with male leads tend to be based around the mc pursuing some goal.
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