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Mastarius
MastariusLv21yr
2023-03-10 16:03

not fanfic, copy paste+add>filler!

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General_Paragon
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Chenglei
ChengleiLv11

Okay, so my review to this Novel will be a little bit neutral. So far, the intro and the backstory are very unique and interesting. However, there are a LOT of things that do not make sense in the story afterwards.... 1) Although the character went through hellish events and earned a will of steel, he still should've had some sort of problem with his psyche when reincarnating. However, this does not show. Instead, the character just seems like any other protagonist that wants to be cool... 2) His ability "Visionary" which allows him to create anything and do anything(?) is not explained in detail and instead makes it seem as if the protagonist can just do and create anything... (Basically he has a Broken ability...) 3) This might not bother everyone, but it sure is annoying, is how the Author places the person or characters name before they speak. As if it were a script for a movie. I would suggest doing something else instead. Maybe like, "I'm going to look cool in this lambo, Jean said to himself as he stared at the black Lamborghini" or something similar. 4) My fourth reason for giving this Novel an average rating is because he seems a bit off with one of the characters? This reason may be a little petty, but 😤😤😤 he messed with one of my favorite female characters in ATG. Xia the Frosty Wife 😂 He made her seem so docile when he introduced her to Jean (the protagonist). I mean... he just casually grabs her hand and makes her get in the freaking Lambo. I'm not sure about this... but I don't think her character would allow him to just casually grab her hand.... I mean C'MON she's the Icy Wife!! Not the docile wife... Now then, although I've said a lot. I also believe that this Fan-fic Novel has potential. All the Author needs to do is a few rewrites and this would make an Excellent Fan-fic. :)

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