Okay, so my review to this Novel will be a little bit neutral. So far, the intro and the backstory are very unique and interesting. However, there are a LOT of things that do not make sense in the story afterwards.... 1) Although the character went through hellish events and earned a will of steel, he still should've had some sort of problem with his psyche when reincarnating. However, this does not show. Instead, the character just seems like any other protagonist that wants to be cool... 2) His ability "Visionary" which allows him to create anything and do anything(?) is not explained in detail and instead makes it seem as if the protagonist can just do and create anything... (Basically he has a Broken ability...) 3) This might not bother everyone, but it sure is annoying, is how the Author places the person or characters name before they speak. As if it were a script for a movie. I would suggest doing something else instead. Maybe like, "I'm going to look cool in this lambo, Jean said to himself as he stared at the black Lamborghini" or something similar. 4) My fourth reason for giving this Novel an average rating is because he seems a bit off with one of the characters? This reason may be a little petty, but 😤😤😤 he messed with one of my favorite female characters in ATG. Xia the Frosty Wife 😂 He made her seem so docile when he introduced her to Jean (the protagonist). I mean... he just casually grabs her hand and makes her get in the freaking Lambo. I'm not sure about this... but I don't think her character would allow him to just casually grab her hand.... I mean C'MON she's the Icy Wife!! Not the docile wife... Now then, although I've said a lot. I also believe that this Fan-fic Novel has potential. All the Author needs to do is a few rewrites and this would make an Excellent Fan-fic. :)
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Thanks for the review, now i will answer you: 1) you are right, mc is too calm and relaxed, i'm sorry about it since i feel more comfortabke to write a main character like that. 2)Visionary is exactly like you said, there is almost no limit about what you can do, the only thing limiting it is your imagination, which can be considered as a double edged sword because if something frighten you, you image that thing as if it is extremely dangerous, and visionary will make that happen. 3) i can't do anything about writing style, i wrote like that for 7 or 8 novels, and it's a bit hard to change the habitude. 4) I apologize for not making Xia Qingyue look like she should be, I just thought that the best method to be with an ice queen type of person is being almost indifferent with her, since he isn't blatantly trying to rape her, even if it was just a prank, she will not do much about him either. Thanks for the review and i hope you can continue to read the novel. **: if you want some changes in the plot, since it seems too close to the main plot, you just need to wait that the small changes bring a butterfly effect and cause bigger changes later, which will only get bigger with time
