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2019-07-09 03:38

Hi there!! I’ve read a few chapters of your story so far and am pleased with it. Nice cover art as well to attract your readers. I also agree with all the reviews on grammar. Perhaps you can try grammarly? It helps edit and spots grammar mistakes which some were simple I spotted in the story. You are beginning writer so I do wish you the best of luck upon building vocab and such. I have nothing else to say other than that your story is interesting and I will continue reading. Updates seem stable and characters could use more work on the emotions but with time, I think I can see the characters slowly grow as well!! Take all reviews with great criticism and good luck on this story author~

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THANKS.

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posted chapter 172

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