This started pretty decent but has started to get more and more ridiculous as it goes along. Powers and transformation don’t make sense for the level the MC’s supposedly at, MC gets abilities that defy the laws of the world, so on and so forth... If you’re a fan of Tales of Demons and Gods, this fan-fic will probably leave you disappointed. If you’re looking for a novel about an OP MC and don’t want to think about if anything makes sense...meh, might as well try it.
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Thanks for the critic. Sad that couldn't help meet your expectation. Hope you just give a brush up
harem or nah?
Hey bro I want to ask. I writing a TDG fanfic. I wanted to know if you can give me a detailed review as I haven’t been getting much so could improve my writing. The only thing I know is that some names I miss spelled and certain autocorrect errors. But story wise wasn’t given a constructive review.
Use Grammarly bro. It's a nice app for writing while reducing the mistake.
Compare yours with original and see. Try to find what type of word construction you give
I would but I mostly write from my phone as I’m on the go alot
My story sort of has its own story. I just needed a review mainly of the plot itself and to see if their is anything that was poorly executed. For example since my Mc fused with a kids body, I let the psychology and body physiology negatively effect the Mc. Some didn’t like that but I never got a specific reason why. Most just want an op Mc that just magically gets everything.
Bro. You are the creator of your own story. Some may have but some may like your story. Mine was the same. Did you saw the critics on my novel? I don't care about it. I write my idea. Many like it. Be yourself and write it. Don't worry about critics. Take it as you like
I am too writing at my phone using grammarly
Sounds gd thanks A lot bro. I’ll check grammarly out too. Thanks for the advice.
No problem. As a fellow writer, my pleasure to help
Harem?
