It's bad. Plain and ******. Its writing quality is absolutely abysmal and is unable to show any sense of coherency whatsoever. The novel's flow is worse than a stationary rock, as it reads like a set of statements horribly conjoined together. The multitude of grammatical errors kill this novel at a higher rate than measles does in Madagascar. The characters are dry and one dimensional. It's MC is the stereotypical "I train hard with cheats for the good of humanity, I'm never wrong and never corrupted". All the while the side characters blend into background like a chameleon. The world building is next to non-existent. It relies heavily on the reader's own knowledge of the series, and takes little moments to clarify both the setting and characters. At chapter 4, it's tough to truly get a grasp on the story's development. I truly hope the story improves in future chapters. But I know that I won't be there to read them, as these small four chapters were already enough to leave me permanently disappointed.
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Reading my review again. I realize that I came off as a generally ****ty person, and didn't give any real feedback; only hate. While I stand by my low rating of the writing quality. The writing could improve by a lot if the author utilized for transitional words and phrases. This would help fix the choppiness of the sentences. The writing also seemed more like a series of statements, then it did a novel. I couldn't really feel the flow of time in the statement and the sentences felt like bullet points. This could be fixed by writing more about the character's day-to-day life, and decreasing the flow of time. This impersonal log entry feel were especially apparent during the early chapters where each paragraph seemed to represent another year. Some more world building would also be nice. It seemed that most of the characters were simply inserted in, instead of being introduced in. Plus the setting felt unimaginative and neutral, as nothing was really done to describe what the place looked like. The character archetypes which many of your characters seem to fall under could be solved by a few things. You could mix and match archetypes in a single character. You could also simply just add imperfections to the character that will negatively influence their actions in later chapters. Or, you could write more about what characters are feeling in the moment, as I found little to no examples where the characters feelings were described. Again though, I can't really comment on the story's development, as I haven't fully read through the novel. Either way, I hope my initial review doesn't discourage you, and you continue on in your writing journey. Thanks for reading, peace out.
I just write it for fun. I am not a full-time writer. I write you read as ****** as that. So i don't mind. If you like it then good if not that is also good.
