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Doy2x
Doy2xLv56yr
2018-11-08 08:48

Mc with op spirit so early on? Still not that op compared to Tang san with all his knowledge from a cultivation world. Mc is only a detective, so many weird spirits can't there be a spying spirit?

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Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

hehehe, you will see how a detective conquers this world

SucoDeFruta
SucoDeFrutaLv5

Autor tá errado o primeiro homem da Cang Yue foi Yun che, então já que o Ryu pegou ela antes de Yun che o certo e ela ser virgens

Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

the story is different. so just read ahead.

SucoDeFruta:Autor tá errado o primeiro homem da Cang Yue foi Yun che, então já que o Ryu pegou ela antes de Yun che o certo e ela ser virgens
SucoDeFruta
SucoDeFrutaLv5

Só quero saber com quem a Cang Yue perdeu sua virgindade??? Se não foi com o mc eu to fora, vou largar essa fanfict.

Aoalbjorn
AoalbjornLv3

I felt liike MC is a side character. hes very weak weaker than tang san.

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Monarch_
Monarch_Lv5

So let me break down why I gave this review: Writing Quality: The authors writing quality is decent. It’s not making me gag, but at the same time it’s not the best writing I have ever seen. As such it’s a decent three for writing. Stability of Updats: The only reason I gave this a four is because honestly I don’t know how fast he updates, all I know is that he does. For me that at least warrants a four star. Story Development: This is where the story really starts disappointing me, like most other fan-fictions do. First of all the MC is far too OP. He is a rank 57 when he is what 12 and his true combat ability is even better then that. The only advantage he has is his strong spirit and his previous memories yet he learnt the art of hidden weapons by HIMSELF WND better then the genius tang san. HOW DOES THAT EVEN MAKE SENSE. Not only that, I fee like Ryusei is almost the same as Tang SAN. Spirit Hall killed his parents, he treats tang hao as a father figure and he is in shriek academy. That’s not even the end of my complaints. I mean why is the author shipping with essentially every female in the Shrek academy. I don’t even get that!!! One of my favourites part of the original novel was Rong Rong and Oscars love story but now as a twelve year old she is already dreaming of making him her husband. And just a small portion of my complaints. Character Design: The character design is even worse than the story development. I mean one of the most fundamental responsibilities of an author is to make the reader relate to the MC but this author seems to be doing the opposite. At first Ryusei was too soft and ***** which I honestly did not mind as it was a good change of pace for me. BUT THEN THE SPIRIT HALL ATTACKED. Now the guy seems to be constantly going through puberty and is extremely unreasonable. He is the main reason that I can’t even bear to finish the story, though I did get pretty deep into it already. Finally the world design: What can I even give this??? This is a fan fiction and up-till now the author has not added anything new to the world that would push up the rating to a three or four star. Overall the story really only deserves a two star.

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