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Arqemi
ArqemiLv126yr
2018-11-19 05:42

Want some points? 1-slow update with already existent content to copy from(TRUE) 2-why is this going for romantic way that doulou did? I would rather see one POV of romance between mc and rr not anyone else or harem with the mc???? 3- why the **** is the mc still not transforming? What the faq is going on? 4- are you sure you have read the story? 5- and dam he is not even looking at 60-90000 years old spirits on his 6th ring? 6-my god can you put them both in the same room? Romance needs a notch up. 7-and why the faq is this guy not utilzing good materials for hidden weapons?! 8-you are doing filler chapters at max slow pace? Howmuch are you packing at your patreon? Do you think you would earn a fortune this way? Its becoming less enjoyable how stupid you are writing, acting and thinking. 🤔 overall this is beyond stupid, truly one more push and dropped, its just that bad WITH EXISTENT CONTNT TOO, do you see how funny this is? If i wasnt in college i would probably do some stories that stomp this.

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Joary
JoaryLv12

on a scale of the bullies in city #1 to Spirit Empress, how bad is its accuracy?

Joary
JoaryLv12

is oscar there?

Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

Yea it is slow. But it is because of patreon yes i admit it. But so what. Those guys are paying, why shouldn't they get the benefits and i alsi go to college and fins thr time so stfu about your time problem. Besides his 6th ring is 100k year old so stpu about his spirit rings problrm. And what should h transform into, a dragon.

Arqemi
ArqemiLv12

Grow up.

Evil_Dragon
Evil_DragonAuthor

Same 2 you

Arqemi:Grow up.
Baqua
BaquaLv4

already in collage but still have chunni tendecy, imagine the cringe while writing your cringy story.

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