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ErozothDraeor
ErozothDraeorLv66yr
2018-12-28 12:58

It is by far one of the worse fan fiction of this type. The MC, supposedly, HUNDREDS of MILLIONS years old, lacks common sense and basic survival instinct. The most annoying part of this novel? It's not an improvement, it's not even a different story from the original. It follows the same steps and arcs with a different MC, he even fights the same evil family (which he is a member off), that the original MC fights at first. To finish, the MC is the weakest part of this novel and due to it not being original its not worth the time reading further which is why the low score on story (being the same as original), character design and world background are a copy.

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ElionAVL
ElionAVLAuthor

I see, thanks for the review. Yeah I also saw the same problem as you, I didn't really add something in the first 59ch, but I'd really LOVE if you check the other 100 chapters, I deviated from the story... Which is even worse... I'd rate my story bout the same as you.

ErozothDraeor
ErozothDraeorLv6

The thing is, the writing quality is great as you can see by the stars, which is the only reason I wrote the review (my first review btw). I feel you followed the plot to much and didn't really thought how things look from reader perspective, I always imagine that the fanfic is aimed to correct what many people didn't like about a novel (maybe the MC suffers to much, maybe he is too stupid, maybe he is too cruel). Anyway, its only one novel, my words may have been too extreme but in general I hope the author sees it and maybe takes something. Good luck in future novels.

ElionAVL:I see, thanks for the review. Yeah I also saw the same problem as you, I didn't really add something in the first 59ch, but I'd really LOVE if you check the other 100 chapters, I deviated from the story... Which is even worse... I'd rate my story bout the same as you.
ElionAVL
ElionAVLAuthor

No but, I'm kind of laughing because nearly 60-70% of my novel isn't even based in the actual novel's stories, it's original story. Which is also a reason why this fell out of top 20 xD

ErozothDraeor:The thing is, the writing quality is great as you can see by the stars, which is the only reason I wrote the review (my first review btw). I feel you followed the plot to much and didn't really thought how things look from reader perspective, I always imagine that the fanfic is aimed to correct what many people didn't like about a novel (maybe the MC suffers to much, maybe he is too stupid, maybe he is too cruel). Anyway, its only one novel, my words may have been too extreme but in general I hope the author sees it and maybe takes something. Good luck in future novels.
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Don't expect this novel to be like every other fanfic, where the MC actually knows about the world he got sent to, while also being overpowered. But for me I like those types of fanfics where the MC actually knows the world he got reincarnated into, and he takes advantage of future events that are going to happen. Of course a Little OPness never hurt nobody. Many people might say that the one thing this novel has going for it is that it has no harem. Which for me I don't mind either way, as long as it's a good story. But for me this novel has a lot of problems from the very beginning. In the first chapter he's described as someone who has been reincarnated multiple times. One of those worlds being the Naruto World, which he knew about before hand. He has also lived Millions if not billions of years. During all that time he has accumulated millions of years of knowledge and experience. The author gave him this OP background, where the MC was actually at the top of the food chain in his previous worlds. But then comes the next chapters and he dumb's down the MC and nerfs his abilities. He nerfs him so hes not so OP early on, but doing that disregards how stuff works like chakra. He also dumb's him down when hes supposed to be the smartest person in all the universe. Whats the point of giving him a background like that just to nerf him. Why not just give him a not so overpowered background or do the old cliche "he lost his memories" then over time unlock them to make him stronger. You would think being in a different world of cultivation. He would want to get stronger, because he does not know what may happen. I mean he knows nothing about this world so he knows nothing about future events, and him having lived in other worlds of cultivation were the strong pray on the weak. You would think he would be in a hurry to get stronger so that nothing unexpected happens that's out of his control, but he doesn't. He has the mind set of "Will see what happens". He doesn't act how you would think some one that has accumulated so much experiences in his many years of life would act. At times the MC is smart and at times he's dumb, he's inconsistent. He has certain skills where you wonder why he isn't taking advantage of them like the Clone Jutsu of Naruto's. There's just too much stuff that doesn't add up and i would be writing forever. So I just can't keep reading it anymore. Score wise I'm giving the writing quality a 4-star. It wasn't too good to start, but it got better over time. Stability updates I'm giving it a 3-star. I went and looked at his recent updates to see how frequent hes updating. It doesn't look too stable but it's good enough Story development for me is a 2-star. MC was dumb down so it Sort of ruined it from there for me, and the pace is too slow. It feels like it's at least three times slower than the original novel. Character design 1-star. What's the point in giving him an OP background just to dumb him down and nerf him. World development 2-star. What is there to say about this. Its basically the same world as the original. From what I have read he hasn't done much to change it yet. You may like it but, i just don't so this is my review.

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