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Athame
AthameLv56yr
2019-02-18 21:30

I expected to at least enjoy this fanfic, but I really can't. The beginning of the story is somewhat okay, MC lived on earth, died, reincarnated in a cultivation world, died, reincarnated in a Naruto world, he became strongest there and died. After his death he must have thought "Wow, I died and managed to fuse spirit and soul energy, I should just detonate my spread out energy, just what could go wrong?" Then he is reincarnated in TDG world as a member of Shen family, a son of OC (brother of the current patriarch). And surprise, his soul is damaged, he manages to get elixirs from his father to repair it faster. He knows that his father was poisoned by his uncle, he started to heal him, but what could go wrong when his father must go on a dangerous expedition? He could have given him some pills to help him a bit, it may not have mattered at all, but he just didn't bother to do it, because "What could go wrong?". His father dies, like some random thug, his sole role was to give him elixirs, but it didn't really matter. MC can repair his soul in one year, what does the author decide to do, heal him forcefully because why not? As a side effect, he can't cultivate in next 4 years. The author said that MC is cold and calculating, and because of that he can't have a harem, yet he doesn't mind his arranged marriage. The MC was cultivating for billions of years, but he supposedly isn't a "cultivation maniac", if he isn't one then who is? He doesn't have ane purpose, a goal, everything he does feels like he just came up with, I cultivated this technique in 2 of my lives, it's really great, but I don't feel like doing it this life. He decides to cultivate untested technique, because why not? And all of this logic discrepancies wouldn't matter as much if our MC who lived for billions of years didn't behave like a retarded kid who can do something intelligent when the author feels like it.

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Chunchunmaru_sama
Chunchunmaru_samaLv6

I wanted to re-read this again but damn! You just reminded me of the reason why I dropped it

BrabbitX
BrabbitXLv5

If any1 still reads this fanfic after reading your review, they must be desperate to read ANYTHING.

Arekuruu_Tento
Arekuruu_TentoLv12

Same I dropped It a while ago and wanted to reread it but now Ik why I dropped Thanks man

Henil_Patel_6069
Henil_Patel_6069Lv4

same here bro after only 12 ch. I had no interest in this novel

Chunchunmaru_sama:I wanted to re-read this again but damn! You just reminded me of the reason why I dropped it
Kalachri
KalachriLv4

well pretty sure that if you did something twice for billion of years you would also get bored of it so you would like something different in your third life

PeakyPeak
PeakyPeakLv3

now i remember this one.. the one i drop cause there's tons of plot holes.. and discrepancy on the MC with 'ash ketchum syndrome' .

Abdul_Syed
Abdul_SyedLv10

I feel like the reason some websites don't allow comments is to prevent readers from criticizing their work like this so no one will read it, even though it is helpful in not letting people read these kinds of poisonous works.

Daoist_Chaos02
Daoist_Chaos02Lv2

PeakyPeak:now i remember this one.. the one i drop cause there's tons of plot holes.. and discrepancy on the MC with 'ash ketchum syndrome' .
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DaoistObvious
DaoistObviousLv14

I am

BrabbitX:If any1 still reads this fanfic after reading your review, they must be desperate to read ANYTHING.
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BrabbitX
BrabbitXLv5

Since you liked your own comment, i'm not surprised.

DaoistObvious:I am
DaoistObvious
DaoistObviousLv14

if I don't like my comment, who will?

BrabbitX:Since you liked your own comment, i'm not surprised.
Lifeisnotdaijobu
LifeisnotdaijobuLv13

Well I won’t be reading this one

DonGuirit
DonGuiritLv4

self love

DaoistObvious:if I don't like my comment, who will?
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AsianLadyBoy
AsianLadyBoyLv13

Don't expect this novel to be like every other fanfic, where the MC actually knows about the world he got sent to, while also being overpowered. But for me I like those types of fanfics where the MC actually knows the world he got reincarnated into, and he takes advantage of future events that are going to happen. Of course a Little OPness never hurt nobody. Many people might say that the one thing this novel has going for it is that it has no harem. Which for me I don't mind either way, as long as it's a good story. But for me this novel has a lot of problems from the very beginning. In the first chapter he's described as someone who has been reincarnated multiple times. One of those worlds being the Naruto World, which he knew about before hand. He has also lived Millions if not billions of years. During all that time he has accumulated millions of years of knowledge and experience. The author gave him this OP background, where the MC was actually at the top of the food chain in his previous worlds. But then comes the next chapters and he dumb's down the MC and nerfs his abilities. He nerfs him so hes not so OP early on, but doing that disregards how stuff works like chakra. He also dumb's him down when hes supposed to be the smartest person in all the universe. Whats the point of giving him a background like that just to nerf him. Why not just give him a not so overpowered background or do the old cliche "he lost his memories" then over time unlock them to make him stronger. You would think being in a different world of cultivation. He would want to get stronger, because he does not know what may happen. I mean he knows nothing about this world so he knows nothing about future events, and him having lived in other worlds of cultivation were the strong pray on the weak. You would think he would be in a hurry to get stronger so that nothing unexpected happens that's out of his control, but he doesn't. He has the mind set of "Will see what happens". He doesn't act how you would think some one that has accumulated so much experiences in his many years of life would act. At times the MC is smart and at times he's dumb, he's inconsistent. He has certain skills where you wonder why he isn't taking advantage of them like the Clone Jutsu of Naruto's. There's just too much stuff that doesn't add up and i would be writing forever. So I just can't keep reading it anymore. Score wise I'm giving the writing quality a 4-star. It wasn't too good to start, but it got better over time. Stability updates I'm giving it a 3-star. I went and looked at his recent updates to see how frequent hes updating. It doesn't look too stable but it's good enough Story development for me is a 2-star. MC was dumb down so it Sort of ruined it from there for me, and the pace is too slow. It feels like it's at least three times slower than the original novel. Character design 1-star. What's the point in giving him an OP background just to dumb him down and nerf him. World development 2-star. What is there to say about this. Its basically the same world as the original. From what I have read he hasn't done much to change it yet. You may like it but, i just don't so this is my review.

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